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If you’re not into any kind of writing, then this is highly likely to not be the blog for you.

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How and Why Does Writing Speak to Us?

The written word is something that we have in common with the ancient Egyptians, with people on the other side of the planet, and with celebrities who we will never meet.

Fiction writing, in particular, bridges gaps in the world, and through time. Have you ever read something written by an author who is long dead?

Whether it’s Jane Eyre or The Art of War, we can hear the author’s voice as we read (and yes, I am well aware that The Art of War isn’t fiction. I’m kind of tired, okay?).

But I digress.

Independent Writers Do It All

When we do it well, and we do it right, the indie author wears many hats. Researcher. Editor. Planner. Marketer. Cover artist (or at least hirer of the cover artist). Bookkeeper. Advertiser. Tax Preparer.

Indy writing is a small business. So, like it or not, you’ve got to know these things, or be able to hire someone who does.

Past, Present, and Future Authoring

One of the best things about authoring is the concept of eternity. Now, I don’t honestly expect anything I write to end up being studied in college or becoming movie fodder. But it is still  there, and it can be there forever if you can (and are willing to) preserve it.

This is why I encourage publishing, by the way, even if you never make a dime.

Eternity.

Character Review — Dr. Mei-Lin Quan

Dr. Quan, a Character Review

Where did Mei-Lin Quan come from?

I didn’t originally have much of a plan for her. She was a necessary character, because I did see Eleanor Braverman needing this kind of medical help. But unlike others such as Kitty and Mink, or Craig or Elise, Mei-Lin didn’t have too much of a voice to start.

A bit like Ixalla, I didn’t really start to understand her until I started writing her.

The Past is Prologue—Backstory for Dr. Quan

When we first see Mei-Lin, she’s packed and leaving Los Angeles, bound for Boston. One of her last acts in California is to write to her ex and tell him to quit bothering her, or else she’ll block him. But that’s most of what we (and I) know.

Characteristics

I wanted at least one character to be a bit overweight, so I essentially elected her to the task. Because the first seven or so chapters exist to foreshadow much of the rest of the story, her weight does the job admirably.

For, who to better contrast with starving characters than an overweight one?

As I wrote her, I learned that she has a high voice, almost like a child’s. In addition, she gets lost easily, with virtually no sense of direction. Furthermore, her family is from Taiwan. And, at least one relative still calls that island Formosa. I also got to know that she had an ex, Chou.

And Chou wasn’t so happy with being her ex.

Purpose/Theme/Motivation: Dr. Quan at Work

There are four characters who I show at work. Five, I suppose, if you count Olga—and I suppose you should. I show Noah at the Boston Globe.

And I show Elise working in the St. Botolph’s morgue. In addition, I show Craig working at NASA. And I show Olga caring for Eleanor. Now, the kids and Eleanor understandably do not have jobs.

But I show Mei-Lin at work more than anyone else but Craig. There are scenes of her getting to work, and starting and ending her day. Plus, I’ve got her seeing patients and even performing surgery. Mei-Lin Quan is, like any other orthopedic surgeon, busy.

Her motivation throughout the piece is to be a healing peacemaker. Unlike the other characters, she doesn’t toughen up much, not even at the end.

Portrayal

I came up with Japanese actress Keiko Kitigawa, and it was mainly due to the below image. But I am open to persuasion to change my mind and choose someone else.

If American audiences know her at all, it’s from The Fast and the Furious: Tokyo Drift. But I think it would be better to have an actress of Chinese extraction. I don’t know. Landi Li is too young (although I do like that she was born on my birthday!).

So, if you’ve got a better idea for a portrayal, let me know in the comments section, thanks.

Actress Keiko Kitigawa, who I see as Dr. Mei-Lin Quan.
Actress Keiko Kitigawa, who I see as Dr. Mei-Lin Quan.

Quotes

The door to the sedan opened, and out staggered a woman of Asian descent with red eyes and messed up hair that looked like she had been sleeping in the sedan for days. She had her purse with her, along with a plastic bag with the logo of St. Botolph’s printed on the side, and a small gym bag. She squinted at Elise. “Do I know you?”

“St. B’s, right?” asked Elise. It was as reasonable a question as any, considering the hospital was one of the few places Elise ever went where there ever were other people.

“Yeah, Orthopedics, Mei-Lin Quan. I think I gave you a ride home a week ago? Days ago? I can’t figure out what day it is.”

“I hear that. And yeah, I remember now. Elise Jeffries. This your car?”

“No. Mine’s in the lot up there, back at St. B’s, if it still is at all.”

“You mean someone stole it?”

“No, at least, hell, I have no idea.” Mei-Lin said, putting her gym bag down and rubbing the bridge of her nose in the cold. “More like wrecked it. There was, God, it was anarchy at the hospital.”

“Anarchy?”
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Relationships

I have nearly nothing on Mei-Lin and Chou, save for her family pressuring her to marry him—and her refusal.

But this will come when I write the prequel.

With Craig Firenze, she’s nervous and excited. They joke around but are also serious. They’re awkward and romantic, too.

Conflict and Turning Point

On what would normally have been a hot summer solstice, there’s a nor’easter. Mei-Lin (like a lot of other people during pressure drops) feels wonky all day. But hope returns when she looks at Craig.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

There really aren’t any Easter Eggs for this character.

Future Plans

Like with the other characters in Mettle, I don’t have any future plans for Mei-Lin beyond the prequel.

Dr. Mei-Lin Quan: Takeaways

This character turned from functional to essential as I wrote her. A lot like Ixalla!

Dr. Mei-Lin Quan — a character who found herself while I found her.


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Character Reviews: Mettle

Eleanor Braverman
Noah Braverman
Craig Firenze
Dez Hunter
Dr. Elise Jeffries
Minka Lopez
Nell Murphy
Olga Nicolaev

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Character Review — Olga Nicolaev

Consider Olga Nicolaev, One of My Original Characters

So, who is Olga Nicolaev?

For Mettle to work, Eleanor Braverman (an Alzheimer’s patient) had to have a caregiver. Because just letting her loose wouldn’t work. And because tying down Noah wouldn’t serve the plot. Enter Olga.

Where Did Olga Nicolaev Come From?

So, you see, I had to have her. Because creating a character with Alzheimer’s means creating a caregiver for that character. But like a lot of other immigrants, I wanted Olga to have a higher education than her speech might indicate.

Therefore, when I was first writing her and getting her accent down, I wanted her to be a lot more articulate than that—in Russian. It’s … like this.

The Past is Prologue — Backstory for Olga Nicolaev

A lawyer in Russia, Olga can’t pass the bar in the US. So, instead, she becomes a caregiver for geriatric patients.  However, it doesn’t help that her English isn’t the best. Olga regularly skips shorter words.

However, she’s not dumb. It’s because she’s just impatient with how hard it is for her to express herself in English.

Description

Russian actress Larisa Luppian, who I see as Olga Nicolaev. Image is for reference purposes only.
Russian actress Larisa Luppian, who I see as Olga Nicolaev. Image is for reference purposes only.

I like Russian actress Larisa Luppian for Olga. But I didn’t want someone who would pretend to be Russian—I wanted an actress who really is Russian.

Purpose/Theme/Motivation

Olga’s initial purpose is simply to be the one to take care of Eleanor. Because I needed her! But toward the end (and I’m getting into spoiler territory here), her arguments save the day.

And all this from the least articulate character in the book!

Quotes {First, Eleanor and Olga are talking}

“Steven?”

“Not here.”

Dez and Noah returned with firewood. “We got some from going past the school and up near the post office. Somebody used a chainsaw, we figure. There were piles of it and more if we want it but a lot of it’s wet.”

“Can we put stuff in your garage?” asked Dez. “Maybe let it dry out in there?”

“Sure. We’ll just move the lawn mower and stuff.”

“Who is this boy?” Eleanor asked.

“I’m Douglas, ma’am. Here, I’ll build your fire back up again.”

“People do that for a living? I should get my purse.”

“That’s okay, ma’am.” Dez added pinecones and sticks before heaving a big log onto the fire. “I’m a volunteer.”

“You’re a good boy. Are you at college with my Noah?”

“Not yet, ma’am.” Dez got up. “Looks like you’re all set for a while. Noah, you coming?”

“Sure, just a sec.” He beckoned Olga. “Come with me a sec, could you please?”

“Yes. I be right back. You play cards with Dez, or he read you. We have Secret Garden for next book.” She followed Noah into the kitchen. “Well?”

“I don’t know how to say this. But Olga, you didn’t have to do any of this. You never had to stay. It’s been a few months, but you have been right here, as if,” he started to cry a little, “as if Ma were your mother, too. And, and I know I don’t say it enough but, fuck it, thank you. Thank you so much for, for everything. You’ve been fantastic and you went above and beyond a long, long time ago.” He clumsily wiped his face. “I don’t know what we’d all do without you.”

Olga awkwardly patted his arm. “She not patient no more. You not employer no more. You family.”
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Relationships

Everyone in Mettle has some sort of a relationship with everyone else. But these are Olga’s two biggest relationships.

Olga and Eleanor

But what is any caregiver’s relationship with a patient? Because Eleanor is essentially helpless, Olga does just about everything for her. And this even includes sleeping in the same room. She is so devoted a caregiver that she is essentially on call 24/7.

When the power goes out, Olga doesn’t always tell Eleanor the full truth about what’s going on. But how can she? And, more importantly, why should she?

But telling Eleanor everything is really just a way to upset the patient. And that is something that Olga is loath to do.

Olga and Noah

Also, what is any employee’s relationship with their employer? Everyone calls her Olga. But she calls Noah ‘Mr. Braverman’, and she call Eleanor ‘Mrs. Braverman’. So, this is somewhat comparable to Caribbean caregivers calling my late mother ‘Miss Shirley’.

Conflict and Turning Point

Olga’s turning point is similar to the other characters in Mettle. But for her, it’s also a way to suddenly become the articulate, sharp friend she has really always been. But it was just English that got in the way.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

So, Olga doesn’t have any continuity with any other storylines.

Future Plans

She will definitely show up in the prequel.

Olga Nicolaev: Takeaways

Originally just a convenient plot device, Olga has a purpose. Because without her, the story would not end like it does. She is a truly necessary part of Mettle.

Olga Nicolaev — an essential part of Mettle.


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If Mettle resonates with you, then check out my other blog posts about how changes in the periodic table nearly kill us all.

Character Reviews: Mettle

Eleanor Braverman
Noah Braverman
Craig Firenze
Dez Hunter
Dr. Elise Jeffries
Minka Lopez
Nell Murphy
Dr. Mei-Lin Quan

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Character Review — Minka Lopez

Consider Minka Lopez, One of My Original Characters

So, just who is Minka Lopez?

A few of the characters for Mettle came to me quickly. Minka is one of them. But she was always the second half of a duo, Kitty and Mink. But she always felt like an insecure outsider.

I originally envisioned her as a kind of hanger-on, who would essentially worship Kitty and the popularity Kitty could bring.

Where Did Minka Lopez Come From?

I think we have all seen teenage girls just like Mink. Yearning to be popular, and hitching their wagon to what they think is the likeliest star.

But then as I started to write more of her, she got a difficult backstory.

The Past is Prologue — Backstory for Minka Lopez

This will come out a lot more in the Nanowrimo prequel story, which may very well have to wait until 2024. But there are little flashes of her background in Mettle all the same.

After all, Kitty is clearly wearing designer this and that, whereas Minka is more of a wannabe. Kitty has someone who styles her hair, perhaps every day and certainly most days. Mink has to do this herself.

Kitty also has somewhat softer outfits, clearly selected to show off her coloring and figure to their maximum potential. Mink, on the other hand, has to guess and make do.

I only hint at Mink’s home life, nothing more. She lives with her Aunt Doreen—but why?

A Description of Minka Lopez

I see the young actress Victoria Moroles for Mink. It’s especially gratifying to me that she made a TV movie called Cloud 9 with Dove Cameron, who I have always seen as Kitty. And this image, I feel, exemplifies their earlier life perfectly.

Victoria Moroles, Dove Cameron, and Tatum Chiniquy in Cloud 9; image is for reference purposes only.
Victoria Moroles, Dove Cameron, and Tatum Chiniquy in Cloud 9; image is for reference purposes only.

Moroles and Cameron also made a TV show together, Liv and Maddie. I really love that I’m not the first person who ever thought about putting these two actresses together.

Unfortunately, they are both past high school roles—and these are junior high/middle school roles, anyway.

Purpose/Theme/Motivation

Apart from trying desperately to be popular, Mink follows Kitty around a lot. Although Dez has something to say about that, at times. But while he and Mink are somewhat competitive for Kitty’s attention, they do get along.

Mink even leaves with Kitty, seeking the center of the city in the hopes of … something. Yet Kitty miscalculates horribly, and Mink barely escapes.

When she returns to Brighton, one of Mink’s main purposes comes to life—she serves as a witness to the horrors of downtown Boston during the extended power outage and other events chronicled in Mettle.

Another one of her purposes is that she has a paper calendar. Even when she is not around, the calendar (which Dez keeps until she returns) keeps the story grounded in time.

Quotes

There was a dull ringing noise, and something grazed Nell’s foot. It was Mink’s earring, but the silver was dull and twisted. Somehow, the feather was still attached. Nell held it up for a second, it looked so strange.

“Minka, I did not tell you to stop.”

“Mrs. Davis, look.” Mink swept her dark brown hair away from her left ear. The other earring was still in, as twisted as the one Nell held in her hand. The remnants of that earring were shoved into a too-small piercing in Mink’s ear, and she bled.

Mrs. Davis sighed. “Go to the nurse’s office. With, hmm—with Penny.”

Nell froze.

Kitty spoke up. “I should go. I mean, I’m practically a nurse already. I am a total fucking angel of mercy or something.”

“No, you’re the next one to read. Now Minka and Penny, go straight to the nurse’s office.” Mrs. Davis scribbled her signature on a pair of hall passes. “Get fixed up and come right back. No dawdling and no detours, understand?”

“Yeah,” Mink and Nell said almost at the same time. They left the classroom, closing the door behind them.

The hallway was all but deserted. “You gonna punch me?” Nell asked.

“No. Why would I do that?”

“Kitty usually does.”

Mink shrugged. “Oh. Well, she’s not here. So, I won’t.”

“You do everything Kitty tells you to?”

Mink gathered her hair into a rough ponytail. “It’s important to be popular. Fuck, this thing hurts.”

“Here, I found the other one.” Nell handed over the ruined earring.

“Did you stomp on it?”

“It was like that when I picked it up.”
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Relationships

Mink doesn’t really have any romantic relationships in the story. But she does have one big, fat friendship relationship.

Kitty and Mink

The first time we ever really see her, it is in history class. And, she’s got not only her own homework, but also Dez and Kitty’s. Did Mink do their homework? I would have to say yes. In particular, I see Kitty as such a user that this would pretty much be expected. That is something like, if you want to hang around with me, this is the price of admission and access.

Mink is very much a sycophant for Kitty, going along with nearly anything and everything, in the almighty service of her attempts at social climbing.

Conflict and Turning Point

Mink’s conflict and turning points are virtually the same as for the other characters. In particular, when the power goes out, her life turns upside-down. Because her aunt is missing. Mink, essentially, becomes a homeowner at the age of 14.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

I don’t have any Easter eggs for her and don’t really see a way to add her to overall continuity or crossing over to anything else I’ve written.

Future Plans

Mink will show up in the prequel, as will the other main characters.

Minka Lopez: Takeaways

While all of the characters in the story change and grow, her change is perhaps the most radical. Because once she’s been through the events of Mettle, there is no way she will see social climbing or popularity as being important ever again.

Minka Lopez — the survivor character.


Want More of Minka Lopez and the Rest of Mettle?

If Mettle resonates with you, then please be sure to check out my other blog posts about how changes in the periodic table nearly kill us all.

Character Reviews: Mettle

Eleanor Braverman
Noah Braverman
Craig Firenze
Dez Hunter
Dr. Elise Jeffries
Nell Murphy
Olga Nicolaev
Dr. Mei-Lin Quan

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Character Review — Lex Feldman

Consider Lex Feldman, One of My Original Characters

Who is Lex Feldman?

Lex Feldman is a kind of nervous but ultimately good person who gets Marnie to loosen up in some ways—and straighten up and fly right in others. He is an important character in the Enigman Cave Universe.

Where Did Lex Feldman Come From?

I went with Lex because I was watching reruns of The Tribe! The characters, of course, are rather different. For one thing, my Lex isn’t a jerk.

The Past is Prologue — Backstory for Lex Feldman

Competition for spots on wedge ships like the Valentina Tereshkova was fierce. Lex tried for the Chief Veterinarian job, but lost out to Tom Ciorciari. He was also breaking up with his last truly serious relationship before Marnie. For Lex, getting away to space is a way to heal.

But he can also spread his wings and become his own person.

Description

I see Oscar winner Adrien Brody here. It’s important for me to, in general, have Jewish actors playing Jewish characters. So, here we are.

Adrien Brody, who I see as Lex Feldman, DVM
Adrien Brody, who I see as Lex Feldman, DVM. Image is for reference purposes only.

He’s attractive but not 100% conventionally. I also love the idea of him being this twig of a person.

Yet he’s in love with Marnie, who is anything but a twig.

Purpose/Theme/Motivation

For Lex, most of his motivation is to be there for Marnie and support her in everything she does.

But he testifies for the side seeking to prove Enigmans are not intelligent.

When she chooses him to come along for First Contact, part of it is for moral support.

But he’s also there to essentially represent the animal side of things. Even with Enigman sapience essentially proven, there is always a smidgen of doubt.

Quotes

The scene: the hearing to try to prove Enigman intelligence. Here, Lex is cross-examined by Counselor Terry Lynn Shull. Hunter Garcia is serving as a magistrate.


Terry Lynn said, “Tell me, Doctor, do gorillas make gestures?”

“They do, and they can make gesture sequences, too.”

“Do they have a language?”

“We’re not sure.”

“Doctor, what’s a gorilla’s IQ?”

Lex motioned to his tablet and Hunter nodded. Lex clicked around a little. “Maybe seventy to ninety, but that’s just Koko, a gorilla who was taught to use American Sign Language. Gorillas without known sign language don’t necessarily have a measurable IQ, and Koko could have been mainly making herself look good.”

“How so?” Terry Lynn asked.

“She may have figured out that making gestures would get her what she wanted, but she didn’t necessarily truly comprehend much of what she was signing. If she signed for juice, let’s say, and she kept getting juice, she probably learned making a particular sequence of hand gestures meant she would get a cup of juice. But it might just be like a dog barking to ‘speak’ and then getting a treat. Both animals realize that if they do X, then Y happens. But it does not necessarily mean Koko understood that her sign for juice really designated juice. It’s not possible to tell if Koko understood it was a representation for the concept of juice.”

“What’s a dog’s IQ, Doctor?”

“Dog intelligence isn’t really measured like ours. It’s measured more in terms of problem solving, learning, and thinking. Cognitive processes, as it were.”

“Are Enigmans smarter or dumber than dogs, Doctor?”

“I have no idea.”

Relationships

Amy Allenby

Lex and Amy knew each other as children, and were on and off again for years. Marnie is particularly surprised when Amy writes to Lex and refers to him as Alec.

But Amy wants to stay in the Solar System, and she wants children. So, she and Lex parted ways and she married someone else.

With very little on her, even I can only conjecture. But he does at one point say she really did a number on him.

In all honesty, though, I have no idea of the specifics—and I created these characters!

Marnie Shapiro

When Marnie first walks into the Veterinary while he’s on duty, he’s nervous and clumsy, dropping a paper towel roll multiple times. For a junior guy used to working the night shift, a visit from the captain is a novelty. And, he already thinks she’s attractive.

When they go to Enigma (Tom is too shocked by finding chlorophyll and feels it’s all too much), they get overly excited when they first find alien life. And that leads to kisses.
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Conflict and Turning Point

As with the other characters in The Enigman Cave, Lex feels the change come when Carter takes over in the Solar System in a bloody coup d’etat.

But unlike many of the other characters seen in the book, he doesn’t get a chance to declare his stance.

In that way, I treat him like Sharon Townshend and Charlie Hill. But his stand should be obvious. He is as appalled and angered as Marnie is.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

I don’t really have much continuity for him. He’s basically just a solid, dependable love interest.

Future Plans

Since he wasn’t in the prequel, I don’t rightly know if/when I will bring him back. But he is quite literally a supporting character. I don’t see him as being the stuff of his own stories. But I can be persuaded by the right idea…

Lex Feldman: Takeaways

Sweet, smart, nervous, and definitely in over his head, Lex gives Marnie someone in her life who will give back all the caring she exudes to the crew. Because Ben Chase sure as hell never did.

Do  you want more character reviews? Stay tuned!

Lex Feldman — the character who lets the main character shine.


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Marnie Shapiro
Trixie LaRue
Jazminder Parikh, MD
Benjamin Chase
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Character Review — Ginny Carey

Consider Ginny Carey, One of My Original Characters

So, who is Ginny Carey?

The secondary communication officer (she works nights) on the Valentina Tereshkova is important to the storyline in The Enigman Cave. In particular, this is because she has a mathematics background.

… and she also just so happens to be Dr. Jazminder Parikh’s ex.

Where Did Ginny Carey Come From?

In a small way, Ginny’s origins depend on a sorority sister of mine. Alix was a math major who went to library school. I lost touch with her for decades and, unfortunately, only heard of her death after the fact. But I based Ginny on her (somewhat) while I still believed she was alive.

But there are a number of key differences between them.

The Past is Prologue — Backstory for Ginny Carey

I honestly never thought to give Ginny much of a backstory. The main thing that any reader should understand about her is that she has more of a math background than you would normally expect from a communications professional.

But that’s about it.

Description

Slight and looking younger than she really is, Ginny has medium brown hair and eyes and looks bookish. But that is because, well, she is. If the story was taking place in our current time, she would most likely be either a teacher of small classes or a tutor or a librarian.

Purpose/Theme/Motivation

Loyal to Marnie, Ginny has no qualms about finding odd communications and immediately reporting them up the command food chain.

However, since she is a lower decks character, she does not learn about the really bad stuff with Carter until a lot later in the story than the higher up characters do. And, because she and Jazzie are no longer dating, she cannot get any insider information that way.

As Marnie explains in the book, it’s to give people like Ginny plausible deniability. If the senior staff are arrested or even executed, the idea is that Ginny and people like her would have a fighting chance to escape punishment.

Quotes from Ginny Carey {she and Dr. Simon Mendoza are on the surface, looking to capture an alien animal}

Ginny and Simon walked to the stand of ferns and found undergrowth. “Here, jackalope, jackalope,” she called.

“Silly gal. What if it’s a Jill and not a Jack?”

“Is that even possible? What if they’re just single gender?”

“Me you’re asking? I have no idea.” He set down a cage on the ground. “Pity we don’t have bait. Any idea what they eat?”

“When Brian was down here, he said he saw one of them with a small fern frond in its mouth. But who knows which species of fern? Aren’t there, like, three dozen found so far?”

“Approximately,” Simon said. “Here jackalope, jackalope.” She elbowed him.

Relationships

The only relationship I have for her is the one with Jazminder. But why did they break up in the first place? According to the doctor, they just wanted different things out of life. But we’re only hearing one side of the story.

Then again, these are my characters, and I’ve only heard one side of the story as well. Hmm.

Conflict and Turning Point

Much like the main characters and higher-level supporting characters, Ginny’s turning point is essentially when it becomes obvious that the government at home is collapsing.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

Ginny Carey doesn’t star in any continuity or in any Easter eggs. And being more of a lower decks type of person, I did not put her into the prequel.

Future Plans

Right now, I don’t have any plans for her. However, there is some room in the Enigman universe for a sequel or two. In part, I covered some of this in the crossover story, Timelines are Alive. But Ginny was not in that one.

Also, there is a possibility that I might want to write a longer piece about returning to Earth and even confronting Carter and his cronies. Still, someone would have to stay behind on Enigma, and it makes more sense for someone in communications to do that.

For any of the protocols to actually make any sense, Marnie would have to take Astrid Hennigsen along, just in case there were any communications issues on the way back to the mother planet. By the same token, Marnie would also have to take Jazminder with her.

Hence, Ginny and Jazzie would most likely not have a reconciliation. Although keeping scenes of interacting with the Enigmans could work. I don’t know. The truth is, I have never really sat down and tried to map out a sequel.

Ginny Carey: Takeaways

For a lesbian ex-girlfriend character, she started off as being almost a throwaway character. But then I figured out the mystery and came to realize that she would be the most perfect person to solve it. Go, Ginny!


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Character Reviews: The Enigman Cave

Marnie Shapiro
Trixie LaRue
Jazminder Parikh, MD
Lex Feldman
Benjamin Chase
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Self-Review – Your Planet Smells Like Wet Dog

Time to Look at Your Planet Smells Like Wet Dog

I love this line, and the title came long before the plot of Your Planet Smells Like Wet Dog.

I wrote this story during the second quarter of 2018.

Background

The title or at least the idea of it came from a series of fan fiction stories I wrote during the 2010s. But this story has nothing to do with those, apart from the fact that the aliens in both instances are rather canid in both appearance and aspect.

Plot for Your Planet Smells Like Wet Dog

When Private Rachel Corcoran, a data specialist, arrives to work with a canid alien species to merge their database with ours, she commits an unpardonable diplomatic gaffe almost immediately.

Characters

The characters are Rachel Corcoran, her unnamed supervisor, the canid alien supervisor, and Rachel’s alien counterpart, Gray. There is a third alien, but they never speak and I do not describe them at all.

Memorable Quotes

The three aliens standing with us were fluffy, with foxlike ears and pointed snouts. As one, they all tilted their heads to one side as they listened to the translation through their version of earbuds. I tried not to chuckle.

Their leader, who was reddish, spoke and we waited for the translation. “What does that mean?”

My superior officer was about to answer for me when I just said, “Forget it. I’m an idiot. I’ve got no diplomatic experience, and it shows.”

My superior added, emphasizing the first word, “Private Corcoran here is not used to the niceties of embassies. Her background is in data. She’s here to help you integrate your records with our own.”

“Yes, yes, of course. My right hand here is versed in such things. We are all anxious to see how our two technologies can merge.” The canid leader indicated a shorter alien with a kind of blue merle fur pattern. They were all canid, but at least they were wearing clothes. Thank God for small miracles.

“We’ll leave you two to get acquainted,” my superior said. Then she whispered to me, “Try not to make an ass out of yourself again, Rachel.” I nodded and they left.

Genre and Overall Mood

The genre is hard science fiction. And while the initial bit would make you believe that we might even suffer an attack for Rachel’s inability to keep her trap shut, it turns out all right. And so, the overall mood is positive.

Rating for Your Planet Smells Like Wet Dog

The story has a K+ rating. There is some very mild language in there, and at the start, it does feel as if things could go south rather quickly.

Takeaways from Your Planet Smells Like Wet Dog

It is a wonder, in science fiction, how anything gets done properly. And perhaps one of the biggest issues, I believe, is that there could always be someone a lot like Rachel, who would engage her mouth a lot earlier than she would engage her brain.

Oops. But at least she did not start an interplanetary incident. So, we will give her a gold star for that one. A really, really small star. Let’s not get carried away here.

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Writing

So, what is all this about writing?

Boy oh boy, writing rules. I mean it.

The Before Time, Where There was Weeping and Wailing, and Gnashing of Teeth

So, one aspect of my career transition consists of writing a lot more. This has been both fiction and actual report-style stuff.

And I have found that I had truly missed it.

Sure, I had typed tons and tons of stuff before. But a lot of it covered such thrilling topics as documenting queries, or making lists of terms used by public service officers. It very rarely encompassed topics with wit, or style.

And I certainly did not have permission to make up any of it.

NaNoWriMo, I Loved You

I had known about NaNoWriMo for a while, but had never thought I had anything to offer.

In 2013, I woke up with an idea during the last week of October. I created a wiki and an outline for it, and I signed up.

And I wrote. And wrote.

Then about halfway through the month, I had finished. By the end of the month, the story had gone to beta readers and was edited.

But Now it is Over….

But I am still writing. RIP NaNoWriMo, but I can still do this on my own. And so, I will.

Now the Real Writing Fun Begins

Because, yes, it has been published.

It was and is the right thing to do, and the right path.

In addition, it feels fun. And it still feels pretty damned exciting. It feels like it is a fit.

Furthermore, it does not feel like something where I am stretching to fit into an idea dreamt up by someone else, or parallel a vision held by someone else. And I certainly do not feel like I was going through the motions. In addition, it does not feel like ho-hum, same old-same old.

Furthermore, it releases a pent-up inner artist who was shouted down by pretty much everyone I knew for way, way too long in my life. And that is exceptionally freeing.

It feels right. And it feels honest. So it feels free. It feels good.

And it feels like it is about damned time already.

Takeaways, the Future, and All That for Writing

The WIPs (works in progress) are piling up. And the publication dates of Untrustworthy and various anthologies are retreating further and further into the past. Although the Lizzie Borden House anthology at least is a lot more recent.

So, what does that mean? Well, in all honesty, it means I am probably going to go the self-publishing route, sooner rather than later.

Is it a good idea? I have no idea. But it is better than doing absolutely nothing. And it is also a damned sight better than just letting it all rot on my hard drive.

Pretty soon, it will be time to fling it out to the universes. Damn the torpedoes, and full speed ahead.Click to buy Untrustworthy on Amazon

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Trust Your Readers

I wrote a good chunk of this blog post on Facebook in response to a request to review a rather detailed outline that, unfortunately, seemed to have far too many of the wrong details. And the thought that I kept coming back to was this one: trust your readers.

Why Should You Trust Your Readers?

The idea behind trusting your readership is that you know and acknowledge that they are intelligent. They don’t have to get an infodump about everything and anything that happens in your characters’ lives.

Not every moment is fraught, and not every moment matters.

You know, just like in real life.

How Do You Trust Your Readers?

One easy way you can trust your readers is to not spoon feed them every single little bit. You don’t have to provide explanations for everything. For example, there are some foreign words and phrases that most Americans (assuming your readers are Americans) just know.

Which words and phrases?

These are phrases and words like bonjour, aloha, shalom, déjà vu, mañana, pasta e fagioli, omega, fjord, and carpe diem. Most importantly, these are words that you really do not need to translate for your readers.

But words like shemesh, limpia para brisa, or folgen? You’d better translate them. By the way, in order, that’s Hebrew for sun, Spanish for windshield wiper, and German for follow.

You can help out your readers by adding context, too. That’s still being trusting. But it’s also being practical and helpful. It also helps you maintain the suspension of disbelief, because making your readers run for a dictionary will make disbelief come crashing down, fast.

Hey, Wait a Second!

What about all those people who don’t know the more common foreign words and phrases? Won’t the act of not translating make their suspended disbelief come crashing down?

Well… maybe.

So, consider your ideal reader. If that person is college educated, then don’t bother explaining what aloha means. But if your ideal reader is a preschooler, then explain it, even if your ideal reader’s parent or grandparent reading to them has a college education.

And if your ideal reader is somewhere in the middle, then use your best judgment. And no matter what, remember that context is your best friend.

So, if your main character is served a dish of prosciutto, and they say, “Ugh, I keep kosher. I won’t eat ham, not even this fancy Italian ham,” then your readers are covered.

You can trust your readers to be smart, and able to follow context.

Here’s an Exercise in Trust

Do yourself an enormous favor, and watch one (or all of them, if you like) of the following classic films.

I’m suggesting older classic films—even though storytelling has changed a bit, and writing for films isn’t identical to writing a book, but it’s close enough for this particular purpose, because they’re often easier to find on cable or streaming or the like:

† The Wizard of Oz
• It’s a Wonderful Life
† The Andromeda Strain (the older one from the 70s, not the remake)

There’s nearly nothing, if anything, about these characters’ ordinary lives. Rather, the films mainly start off with a very short normal scene, but then chaos is introduced very quickly.

Dorothy is in gray Kansas, bored, wondering if there’s something more out there. George Bailey is on a bridge, considering jumping. Military personnel in hazmat suits discover a town where almost everyone has mysteriously died.

Nobody returns a library book. No one lingers over a meal unless something important is being said. No one’s morning ritual makes it to the screen.

An Idea to Make Sure You Trust Your Readers and Write Accordingly

Consider your writing and your chapters like your budget. Chapter 1 costs some amount, the next chapter costs something, etc. It’s as if, in order to get someone to pay attention, you literally have to ‘pay’ something.

Are you with me so far?

Your budget is limited, and you only have enough to get to Chapter 6 or so. However, you can economize (like getting a coupon) when you cut out the fluff.

Chapter 1 will always ‘cost’ the most because it’s the first chapter. Chapters 2 and 3 are also costly but not as much as Chapter 1.

Your final chapter is also fairly costly, and your penultimate chapter is more than for an average chapter, but not really in the same league as Chapters 2 and 3 and your final chapter.

Save on your ‘budget’ by eliminating the regular, day to day, ho-hum stuff that everyone does, unless you can justify it somehow.

If the return of a library book comes with an important conversation that will solve the mystery or lay the groundwork for the romance (or whatever your genre and main plot are), then by all means keep it!

But in that case, keep in mind that the conversation is the part that goes front and center, not the drive or walk to the library itself.

Every time you knock out a dull, pedestrian scene, you can think of it as ‘paying for’ another chapter. You need to make and keep your story something worthwhile for people to want to spend their time on. And, real money, if you plan to sell your work.

If this analogy doesn’t work for you, then consider this.

Real Life Isn’t Like This

No doubt you see people in your life who you don’t live with. In fact, you see them all the time. Classmates, coworkers, people at a gym or a market, folks at a house of worship or club or a park or whatever.

How did those people get up in the morning? Most likely, they brushed their teeth, maybe ate something, washed their faces, possibly showered or bathed, and they put on clothes.

You did not see them do these things. Yet you know they did all or most of the things I just mentioned. You did not need to witness those things, to know they happened.

Your readers don’t have to witness those actions, either. And, truth be told, they probably do not care about those things too terribly much, and they probably don’t think of them much, if at all.

Trust your readers to understand that every bit of this has happened, unless the method is somehow important or things didn’t happen as they normally do, and that matters to the overall plot.

Your readers are smart enough to understand these things happened. You will never have to tell them.

And if you ever try to, don’t be in shock if they behave as if you’re insulting their intelligence. Because, spoiler alert, you are.

Trust Your Readers — Takeaways

Being trusting means you can scrap the unnecessary scenes unless you lace them with meaningful dialogue or interactions or the like. A drive to the library can be important if the main character gets into a crash, or comes out to someone, etc.

But it’s the other stuff that’s vital. The window dressing could be anything.

If you ever wonder if you’re not trusting enough, consider what happens if you replace a scene with something else. If you can move the story along with a walk in the park versus a drive to the library, then your book return scene can probably be scrapped.

But keep the important conversation or the like.

Trust your readers’ intelligence.

And trust your readers, full stop.
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Writing Progress Report – Fourth Quarter 2025

Progress Report – Fourth Quarter 2025

How was the fourth quarter 2025 for writing? So, I spent fourth quarter 2025 on #30Day50k and on looking for work (the story of my life). I did a ton of writing while juggling, well, the rest of my life. So, there was that…

This time frame also included more time spent with my father. Of course, I did not write much during those times.

Fourth Quarter 2025 Posted Works

First of all, I worked on some newer short stories, mainly Little Red. This one has been drafted on paper and so I spent some time editing it and getting it into electronic form.

I also worked on editing older stories and finishing some, to tie up loose ends.

And, I wrote for November, in a kind of Faux NaNo way.

Then on Wattpad I posted nowhere, although I did take note of stats.

Milestones

Also, I have written over 4.02 million words (fan fiction and wholly original fiction combined, with about 2.23 million words in original writing!). So right now, my stats on Wattpad for wholly original works are as follows:

† Dinosaurs – 45 reads, 11 comments
• How to NaNoWriMo – ended up with 26,183 reads, 340 comments (pulled from Wattpad due to their severing their association with NaNoWriMo)
† My Favorite Things (like kibble) – 1,006 reads, 133 comments
The Dish – 259 reads, 24 comments
There is a Road – 196 reads, 28 comments

Published Works as of Fourth Quarter 2025

Also, I am amassing quite the collection of published works! So, here is everything that has found a home so far.

Untrustworthy, which is my first published novel. So, yay!

A True Believer in Skepticism, published in Mythic Magazine.

Almost Shipwrecked, a story in the January 2019 edition of Empyreome, a site which unfortunately is no more. In addition, this story is now a section within a longer story completed in 2025—

Canaries, a short story in the March 29, 2019, edition of Theme of Absence.

Complications, a story in the Queer Sci Fi Discovery anthology. So, this is an anthology where the proceeds went to supporting the QSF website.

Cynthia and Wilder Bloom, stories in the Longest Night Watch II anthology.

Props, a story in the Longest Night Watch I anthology. So this is an anthology where the proceeds go to Alzheimer’s research.

Surprises, a story in Book One of the 42 and Beyond Anthology set.

More Published Works

The Boy in the Band, a story in the Pride Park anthology. So, this is an anthology where the proceeds go to the Trevor Project.

The Interview, the featured story in the December 14, 2018 edition of Theme of Absence. So they even interviewed me!

The Last Patient, a story in the Stardust, Always anthology. This was an anthology where the proceeds go to cancer research.

The Resurrection of Ditte, a story in the Unrealpolitik anthology.

This is My Child, a short story published in the April 8, 2019 edition of Asymmetry Fiction, another site which is no more.

Three Minutes Back in Time, a short story published in Mythic Magazine.

Killing Us Softly, a short story published in Corner Bar Magazine.

Darkness into Light, a short story published in Corner Bar Magazine.

Looks like Lizzie Borden is Vital to the Timeline is published by Riverdale Avenue Books!

WIP Corner

In addition, my current WIPs are as follows:

The Obolonk Murders Trilogy – so this one is all about a tripartite society. But who is killing the aliens?

The Enigman Cave – can we find life on another planet and not screw it up? You know, like we do everything else?

The Real Hub of the Universe Trilogy – so the aliens who live among us in the 1870s and 1880s are at war. But why is that?

Mettle – so it is all about how society goes to hell in a hand basket when the metals of the periodic table start to disappear. But then what?

More WIP

Time Addicts – No One is Safe – so this one is all about what happens in the future when time travel becomes possible via narcotic.

Time Addicts – Nothing is Permanent – this is the second in this trilogy. What happens when time is tampered with and manipulated in all sorts of ways? It is the ultimate in gaslighting, for one thing.

Time Addicts – Everything is Up For Grabs – as the timelines smack together and continue to diverge, it gets harder to tell the “real” timeline from all the newer fake ones. And what if some of the changes are for the better?

The Duck in the Seat Cushion – in the 1960s, MJ Tanner is the only Jewish student in her school in Broken Arrow, Oklahoma. Navigating antisemitism is one thing. But when her mother abandons the family, MJ’s life gets even more complicated.

The Invisible Gang – Tommie Schellenbach is 63, underemployed, still looking for purpose in life. When her cousin Jackie gets sick with stage 4 breast cancer, Tommie will not sit idly by. Neither will their friends Lola and Eden.

The economics of uninsured Jackie getting care are a nightmare, until the quartet starts to fix the problem at its source.

By robbing banks.

Prep Work

So, currently, my intention, for 2027 or 2028’s November writing, is to write the third trilogy in the Time Addicts/Obolonks universe. But I need to iron out the plot! So, I will undoubtedly spend some of this year on that. I have no name for this one yet.

For 2022 – 2026 NaNoWriMo/30Day50k events, I have decided to create a prequel for each of the 5 main universes: Real Hub of the Universe, Obolonks, Time Addicts (while the Obolonks and Time Addicts are in the same universe, I just plain want to write two separate prequels!), The Enigman Cave, and Mettle.

In 2022, I wrote the prequels for Time Addicts and The Real Hub of the Universe. For 2023, it was the Untrustworthy prequel and Obolonk prequels. And for 2024, it was the Enigman Cave prequel. The Mettle prequel was set for 2026.

I am still in the process of writing The Invisible Gang.

So, I anticipate a lot of fun and perhaps a little confusion. But it’s all good!

Fourth Quarter 2025 Queries and Submissions

The older ones have moved. You can find them on my Publishing Stats page. See below for the URL.

It’s been quiet. But that has been by design. Right now, I just plain do not feel like putting myself out there these days. So, this is staying as a small section for the time being.

In Progress

As of fourth quarter 2025, nothing is in the running for publishing.

I have updated the Submissions Grinder and know that, at some point, I will have to get back up on that horse.

But not yet…..

Fourth Quarter 2025 – Most Popular Posts and Pages

And, if it interests you, here are the most popular posts and/or pages from this site!

I look at the following metrics:

† Clicks – top posts: apart from the home page, it was Getting Story Ideas
• Impressions – top posts: Dialogue Tags — How to Use them the Right Way, Avinash Kaushik’s Web Analytics 2.0, a Book Review, Getting Inspiration from TV Shows, and Set Dressing
† Average CTR – top posts: Getting Story Ideas, Character Review — Peri Martin, Character Review — Lex Feldman
• Average Position – top posts (all are at #1!): Self-Review – Alien Justice, Beta Reading Part 2, Optimizing Twitter, my Resume,
Self-Review – Wilder Bloom, The Weird World of Being Published

In addition, self-reviews of the following newer stories all showed up with stats this quarter:

† Jewish Characters in my Fiction
• Self-Review – Fragments
† Character Review — Student #17

Fourth Quarter 2025 – Productivity Killers

So, it is looking for work and visiting my elderly father, what else? And it is looking like fourth quarter 2025 will not be the end of that.

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Self-Review – Rescued

It is Time to Look at Rescued

I have rescued this story from its draft, but it could stand to be longer. However, with its original prompt word, it seems like a relatively ideal story for this posting date, Xmas of 2025.

I wrote this story during the second quarter of 2021.

Background for Rescued

The original prompt was the word salvation.

Much like with the longer and better thought-out Mandy Goes to Aspen, this story is about a rather snarky woman who has to be rescued from a catastrophe.

But Samantha and Mandy end up with somewhat different fish to fry.

Plot for Rescued

Samantha is buried under rubble somewhere in Arizona, thinking that there has been some sort of an earthquake. As her calls for help turn to whispers amidst the dust and debris, she hears a bark and sees a person in full protective gear come to save her.

While things should have been looking up for her, the rescuer lets her in on what happened. It was a terror attack.

Characters

The characters are the victim Samantha, her rescuer and his dog, a few medical personnel, and a liaison named Joyce Chang who helps to give some helpful exposition.

Memorable Quotes

“Save me! Save me!” I screamed with all my might. Which … wasn’t much. But you try screaming after climbing through earthquake rubble some time and see how you do.

The only response was the sound of something falling down, and then the tinkling of breaking glass.

I bet I moved too much stuff. Shit, that might’ve been a really stupid idea.

And you were just going to hang around a bunch of mismatched body parts?

Samantha, you’ve gotta be joking. Or mental. Or both.

I never knew this area got earthquakes. Scorpions? Check. Hot weather? Check. Retirement communities by the billion? Check. But earthquakes? Arizona does not get earthquakes. Until now, I guess.

Every breath I draw, I smell dust. Thank God, no gas or ash. But it’s bad enough. I can’t stay here. “Help! Help me, please!”

Sheesh, that sounded like whining.

Oh, c’mon, you honestly think anyone would blame you for whining?

Genre and Overall Mood for Rescued

The genre is contemporary fiction/disaster epic. The mood is grim and concerning, despite Samantha joking with herself about her predicament. Because there is a very real chance that she will not survive the attack.

Rating

The story has a K+ rating. There is very little salty language, but if you had just had a building fall on you, you would be spouting off some pretty salty language yourself.

Takeaways for Rescued

I kind of like where this one was going, and so it feels rather incomplete. To this day, I have no idea who attacked, or why they attacked Arizona, of all places.

Even I do not know if Samantha makes it. And whenever I feel I want to find out whether she did, I suppose I will finish this one. And then it can be rescued from the world of literary fragments.
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