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Character Review — Kitty Kowalski

Consider Kitty Kowalski, One of My Original Characters

So, who is Kitty Kowalski?

When I was first developing Mettle, a pair of names came to me quickly: Kitty and Mink.

Where Did Kitty Kowalski Come From?

She arrived nearly fully formed. But never confuse this malignant narcissist with Athena’s birth, at full adulthood, from Zeus’s forehead.

Rather, I knew I wanted a mean girl character. And then, as I continued writing her, Kitty became essentially just barely this side of a psychopath.

Yeah, she really is so bad as all that.

The Past is Prologue — Backstory for Kitty Kowalski

When I finally get around to writing the prequel to Mettle, some of her backstory will get a lot clearer. But a big part of it is best said by songwriter Al Stewart in his song Carol.

Your TV mother with her cocktail eyes….”

While Kitty’s mother isn’t necessarily an alcoholic, I see both her parents as being neglectful. But being wealthy means people think of them as being eccentric. And, more importantly, no one calls Child Protective Services on them.

When Mettle first starts, Kitty isn’t living with her parents, and she’s only fourteen years old.

‘Nuff said.

Kitty Kowalski, a Description

Short and blonde and ethereally light, Kitty resembles actress Dove Cameron. Unfortunately, Cameron is already too old to play this role.

Purpose/Theme/Motivation

The truth is, as the consummate party girl, Kitty’s main motivations in life are to get high and piss off everyone around her.

She has no other depth from me because as a person she truly has no other depth.

Quotes from Kitty Kowalski {Yes, she really is this nasty; this is the morning after the power has gone out}

Kitty inspected the saucepan. “Gross. You’re really gonna eat that?”

“You got a better idea?”

“It’s fucking gross. You don’t just eat corn for breakfast.”

“You gonna make me pancakes, or something?”

Kitty wrinkled her nose at him. “I’m not your slave.”

“Hey, you brought it up. I was perfectly happy just making my own breakfast till you decided it sucked.”

“Well, it still sucks. Where’s the fucking internet?” she whined.

“Same place as the fridge and the washing machine and the shower.”

“I miss my phone.”

“Yeah, that, too.” He turned off the flame. He washed a pair of bowls and forks from the dirty dishes in the sink. “Want some?”

“No, are you fucking retarded or something, Dez? That’s just, ugh, it’s repulsive.”

“Suit yourself.” He dumped the corn into a bowl.

Mink entered the kitchen. “What’s left in the cabinets?”

“Green beans, some tuna, I think I saw tomato paste,” Dez said as Mink opened the cabinets and looked for herself.

“There’s pumpkin pie filling, too, and we still have peanut butter. I wish we had bread.”

“Want some corn?” He offered her the second bowl and fork.

“Sure, thanks.” He dumped about half his bowlful into hers. “Kitty, what are you gonna have?”

“I want French toast.”

“If we had eggs, we could make French toast, if we had bread. And a working toaster. Aunt Doreen used to say shit like that.”

“Yeah, she’s hysterical.” Kitty folded her arms and scowled. “This blows.”

Mink shrugged and ate as did Dez. When they were done, she bused the dishes to the sink and washed them and turned to wash more dishes. “Man, we don’t have to live like pigs. Can somebody dry?”

Kitty made a beeline out of the kitchen.

Relationships

Like in the case of a lot of narcissists, Kitty doesn’t have any relationships unless they are transactional. That is, she only wants to know: what’s in it for her?

Dez Hunter

Dez is probably her only conquest who doesn’t just hang on her every word. But at the same time, he has got to be stoked that he is with the hottest girl in their grade. Kitty conveys a great deal of cachet.

Then again, that’s also why Minka Lopez hangs around with her. But don’t mistake their time spent with Kitty as being out of affection. Rather, it’s spent out of a need to social climb within the rigid societal hierarchy of middle school.

Conflict and Turning Point

When Kitty rejects even the meager help being offered to her—the only help anyone can possibly offer—she’s kicked out of the group. Mink tags along because she feels she has to, and they leave.

Which turns out to be so disastrous for both girls.

The reader only learns about this later when Mink is able to rejoin the fold. But we never see Kitty again. Is she dead?

Even I have no idea.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

In Lizzie Borden is Vital to the Timeline, the time travel agency’s director is named Sylvia Kowalsky. And while the spelling differs, that story takes place around 1600 years after the end of Mettle.

So, is Sylvia related to Kitty?

Again, I have no idea.

Future Plans

Since I don’t honestly know whether she’s alive or dead at the end of Mettle, there is little sense in planning anything else for her. But she will be in the prequel.

Kitty Kowalski: Takeaways

As the Schrödinger’s Cat of Mettle, Kitty’s endgame could go in nearly any direction. But unlike Jeannie Scutter Firenze, I just don’t see myself writing a redemption arc for her.

But never say never.


Want More of Mettle?

If Mettle resonates with you, then please be sure to check out my other blog posts about how changes in the periodic table nearly kill us all.

Noah Braverman
Craig Firenze
Dez Hunter
Dr. Elise Jeffries
Minka Lopez
Nell Murphy
Olga Nicolaev
Dr. Mei-Lin Quan

Self Review: Mettle

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Self-Review – Mythic

Let’s Look at Mythic

I like the word mythic, but I am not so sure that it’s the best title for this particular short story.
I wrote this story during the second quarter of 2021.

Background

So, the original prompt word was just the word that became the title. I wanted it to be a bit like a bedtime story that person might tell or read to a child.

And then it turned into a story where the parent was essentially threatening the child. I did not mean to turn us all, collectively, into the boogeyman.

Ewps.

Plot

I did not honestly expect that this one would have such a nasty kicker. But, heh, here we are. Er, sorry, not sorry, gentle readers.

Characters

The characters are just the narrator and their child.

Memorable Quotes from Mythic

The smallest drops of water carve the mightiest canyons. Drip, drip, drip.

Water is all over this world, my child. And this is how we knew there was life here.

Most of that life was good, or at least neutral. That is, outside of true morality or ethics.

But there was one species which did so many wicked things and destroyed so much that they could not be allowed to continue.

Rating for Mythic

The story has a K rating. But don’t mistake that for this being any sort of a sweet or pleasant story. It is a rather nasty one, truth be told.

Takeaways for Mythic

Welcome to another ‘record scratch’ type of ending. Because the truth of the matter is, we should never, ever be surprised if an alien civilization ends up having values that we feel are significantly different from our own.

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Want More of my Short Stories and Novellas?

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Character Review — Corwin Zachary

Let’s Consider Corwin Zachary, One of My Original Characters

So, who is Corwin Zachary?

I like using acronyms, so the idea of the bad guys in Time Addicts using an acronym was irresistible. ZERO is a great acronym. So, as a result, Corwin is the ‘Z’ in the equation.

Where Did Corwin Zachary Come From?

For the bad guys to really be able to do what they’re doing, they need money. Who better to bankroll them, than a wealthy businessperson?

The Past is Prologue — Backstory for Corwin Zachary

Corwin joins ZERO because of an invitation. But why is he brought in, in the first place?

He’s got so much more money than most people of the time, even Peter Ray. His family owns any number of luxury businesses throughout the Solar System. Corwin has so much, he is not hurting for money.

As a result, this makes him incredibly attractive as a partner in crime for the other miscreants in the story.

Description

For Corwin’s look, I am drawn to the actor John Tuturro.

Purpose/Theme/Motivation

Corwin is basically a greedy SOB. But he’s also taken in by Robin McKenna’s promises that they can change time to their own ends, in any way they please. It’s a tempting, irresistible offer, so far as he’s concerned.

Therefore, in some ways, he’s a lot like Elon Musk. He’s got a massive pile of money, but needs new places to spend it. And, if he can make his life easier at the same time, then he’s sold.

Quotes {Josie and Tad Meet Corwin for the First Time}

They got to a doorway, the only door, and it had a zero on it. Pay dirt. You people have got a flair for the dramatic, I see. She knocked. “Yick Wo’s!”

In less than a minute, the door opened, and it got very noisy. The person answering the door was a tall, slightly built man who was probably in his sixties. He had to bellow to be heard. “Yeah?”

Behind him, there was some sort of frenzied activity, but it was hard to see anything. “What’s going on back there?” Josie yelled.

“Stuff,” the guy answered. “Now, what do I owe ya?”

“Seventy-three mercs and forty-eight triangles,” said Tad. “Is that like work stuff back there?”

“It’s stuff, for fuck’s sake.” The guy pulled out a billfold and started to count out his payment.

“Are you hiring?” Josie yelled back. “’Cause what we do is kinda boring.” I don’t know who this guy is, but there’s no question that something or other is going on here. The Robin House is a front for … something.

“What can ya do?” the guy yelled. He handed over a combination of large and small coins to Tad, who traded the bag of food for it.

“I can manage robots,” Tad yelled. “And my pal Jamie here can do books.”

“I already got an accountant. But a manager for robots could work.” He was about to shut the door when Josie put her foot in to stop it.

“I can also take care of a lot of other stuff.” She pulled up a sleeve to show him the clock tattoo on her wrist.

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Relationships

The people in the cabal have interrelationships. But these two are probably the most important for Corwin Zachary.

Corwin and Cassandra

Initially, Cassie is Corwin’s girlfriend. She is a bit ditzy and is not a temporal sensitive. She is much more like a lackey than anything else in the cabal, and her name isn’t a part of the initialism.

Corwin and Robin

Things improve for Corwin Zachary when he trades up for Robin. The problem is, Robin is supposedly still seeing Elston Young.

So as they say in Facebook, it’s … complicated.

Conflict and Turning Point

Corwin’s turning point happens at virtually the same time as everyone else’s in the Time Addicts series, when the team confronts the cabal. And unlike Elston Young, Corwin does not have any redemptive actions.

Sorry, character, but you are going to jail for a long, long time.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

Corwin doesn’t fit in with any other continuities. He did not show up in the Time Addicts prequel, either.

Future Plans for Corwin Zachary

So far, I don’t honestly have any future plans for him. But never say never!

Corwin Zachary: Takeaways

I like the idea of a very wealthy individual looking somewhat hangdog and certainly not being a standard fantasy type billionaire. You know, kind of like Bill Gates in real life, and not like so many billionaires fiction writers love to write about.

Fortunately for us in the real world, Bill Gates is a far better person than Corwin Zachary.


Want More of Corwin Zachary and the Rest of the Obolonk Universe?

If the story of the Obolonks resonates with you, then please be sure to check out my other blog posts about how our society turns tripartite, with humans, robots, and Obolonks.

Character Reviews: The Obolonk Murders

Humans
Peri Martin
Greg Shapiro
Rachel Gifford

Robots
Tommy 2000
Selkhet 3000

Obolonks
TSTITO, the Obolonk leader

Character Reviews: Time Addicts

The Good Guys
Josie James
Dalton Farouk
Tad Lewis
• Cyndi Mendez
† Bobby Brodie
• Keisha Darnell
† Vera Travers

The Bad Guys
Peter Ray
† Dae Ou Xiang
Elston Young

The Obolonk Universe

Self-Reviews: Obolonk Trilogy

• The Obolonk Murders
Self-Review: The Polymer Beat
The Badge of Humanity

Self-Reviews: Time Addicts Trilogy

No One is Safe
Nothing is Permanent
Everything is up for GrabsClick to buy Untrustworthy on Amazon

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Self-Review – The Bleeper

Let’s Look at The Bleeper

The idea behind the bleeper was to create something that, on the surface, almost feels wholesome. But the reality is, it’s a slippery slope right on down to our destruction. And this invention has just greased the wheels.

I wrote this story during the fourth quarter of 2020.

Background

This short story arose from a bit of a thought experiment on my part.

So, here’s what I was wondering. What if the seeds of our destruction were sown by someone who just plain needed the money?

After all, it is entirely possible that whoever invented the torture mechanisms used in the Spanish Inquisition was looking for whatever that era’s equivalent of a paycheck was. As opposed to just wanting to maim and kill as many nonbelievers as possible.

Or maybe the inventor would see it as some sort of a ‘side benefit’. Eek.

The Uncensored Plot for The Bleeper

An inventor, a man living just to this side of the poverty line, has just learned that he is about to become a billionaire.

Why? Because he has invented a device which imparts a mild electric shock whenever someone swears. And now the United States government has just asked him about expanding the unit’s voice recognition capabilities and has ordered four hundred million units.

That is, enough for every single citizen of the United States, regardless of age, gender, citizenship status, or criminal record.

Characters

The characters are the narrator (who I never name. Er, sorry about that, character!), his wife Marynel, and their children, Kelly, Betsy, Louis, and Jimmy.

Plus, there is the Johnson boy, a schoolmate to Kelly. And the Johnson boy’s sister and little brother, and his father. Also, there is the pastor of their church, along with the pastor of a mega church in nearby Kansas megachurch.

Given the time frame and the location, it is entirely possible that this family could run into MJ Tanner and/or her extended clan.

Memorable Quotes

It isn’t often that you get off the phone with someone and know you’ve just become a millionaire.

And that’s me! I’m rich! Oh my God, I – we – are gonna be rich!

I should buy a tux. I need a tuxedo. Wait, do rich people actually own tuxedoes? Do they rent them? Maybe they just buy them, wear them once, and burn them. You know, like tossing the champagne glasses into the fireplace. That reminds me, I need champagne. And glasses for it.

Oh God.

Marynel’s gonna want an evening gown. Maybe two. Or forty. I don’t know. It’s not like we’ll need to economize anymore. The sky’s the limit!

And the kids – holy cow – all four of the kids are all gonna get to go to college. Something me and Marynel never could do. There was never enough cash. Well, there is now.

Rating

The story has a K rating, but you know that it is going to mean the ruin of us all. For, once the Bleeper is adjusted, there is nothing stopping the government from shocking anyone who criticizes the president or the party or anything they’re doing.

Takeaways from The Bleeper

At this point in time, the concept behind this device looks more and more plausible. And it is more and more scary. Plus, let’s face it, more and more like something that the government would love to be able to do.

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Character Review — MJ Tanner

Consider MJ Tanner, One of My Original Characters

So, who is MJ Tanner?

Her full name is Mary Jacqueline Tanner, and she had such a strong voice that I just had to write about her. MJ is the quirky star of The Duck in the Seat Cushion.

Where Did MJ Tanner Come From?

Much like Josie James, Ceilidh O’Malley, and Craig Firenze, MJ emerged almost fully formed, and almost immediately.

The Past is Prologue — Backstory for MJ Tanner

Please recognize that this character review is going to have a ton of spoilers. So, you have been duly warned.

Before the action in the book gets underway, MJ is essentially just an Oklahoma farm girl, born in 1949, with her main difference being that her mother is fairly exotic, a Parisian war bride. MJ and her full-blooded brother Sid and their mother are all Jews.

They’re the only Jews in Broken Arrow.

Description

A somewhat stout, blonde Oklahoma farm girl, MJ laments that she got ‘none’ of her mother’s ethnic good looks. To me, she resembles a young Reese Whitherspoon and sounds somewhat similar.

MJ Tanner and her Purpose/Theme/Motivation

Because the book is written as a kind of mock memoir, a lot of MJ’s purpose in life is to get from point A (age fourteen/almost fifteen) to point Z (age seventy-five).

In the meantime, a lot of her motivations also center around facing her mother and learning to get along with her stepmother and stepbrother. And, given that these are farm folks in the 1960s, yes, there is even a lot of time devoted to saving the family farm.

Quotes {MJ’s family has had a rock thrown through a window, with a note attached and a swastika drawn on it. Her school is having an assembly to address the incident}

I looked for the friendliest face I could see. Until recently, I never would have seen him that way. But that face belonged to Hal. He nodded at me once, so I took it as a sign of permission to do what I felt I had to do.

I got up and calmly walked to the podium where the principal was standing. “Hi,” I said to him. “Is it okay if I say something, too?”

“Of course. It directly affects you, Mary Jacqueline.”

I looked out at the senior class. … “I bet it was really disappointing for you, to learn that none of us got hurt. …. Or maybe you planned it that way, because you didn’t want to face us. It’s easier to just write a note and throw a rock and draw a symbol that you don’t really understand.”

I shrugged. “Why should you care about my family? … the only Jewish person who lives in our house now—you know who that is? Huh? It’s me. It’s just me.”

I paused to look them all in the eye. “Or maybe you thought you’d catch Sid’s in-laws. Was that it? … you’re siding with the monsters who put numbers on their arms and murdered their families. And you’re against all those men—fathers of most of us here—who fought on D-Day. Instead, you decided to throw in your lot with the other side. … I’m sure you think you’re American. But you’ve decided you prefer our enemies.” I shook my head. I stood for a moment, trying to think of what else to say.

Hal ambled up and stood next to me. “I’m on your side, MJ,” he said.

I turned and looked out at the sea of faces again. “… you didn’t break us.”

Relationships for MJ Tanner

In essence, the entire book is all about her relationships. If I went into all of them, I would be writing until the heat death of the universe, heh. So, rather than going into overkill, here are a few that loom very large.

Jim Franklin

Given that MJ is a writer, the idea of her falling for the boy next door is a cliché. She even complains about that within the context of the story.

But once I had started to understand the character, and MJ started to understand him as well, I suppose we both came to the conclusion that he was the best person for her.

Levi and Chloe Franklin

MJ and Jim have twins when rubella (German measles) is at its worst. And Broken Arrow, being a tiny town, doesn’t get the MMR vaccine in time. The loss of anyone’s child will gut pretty much anyone. MJ is no exception.

Walt Tanner

Left to care for both MJ and his son Sid when MJ is fourteen, Walt is a much more hands-on father than the vast, vast majority of men of the time. But Walt is also straightforward and brooks no nonsense.

When MJ suffers heartache, he bluntly tells her that she brought it all upon herself.

Walt is also a lot more liberal and tolerant than most men of the day, particularly for that part of the United States.

But this makes sense, seeing as he marries a Jewish woman who he barely knows. When the draft for the Vietnam war threatens his son and stepson, he’s the one who suggests finding alternatives.

And those alternatives are supposed to be legal. But it feels very much like Walt would look the other way if they weren’t. When Walt passes, Jim says that MJ lets out a wail similar to that when the twins each died.

Lisette Bloch Tanner

MJ’s less than perfect mother is unconventional at best. At her worst, Lisette is irresponsible, particularly when she abandons the family (See, I told you there were spoilers in here. But did you listen? Hmm?).

Because MJ is so young when this happens, her first instincts are to try to keep in touch. And eventually, when the opportunity presents itself in a rather roundabout way, she goes to confront Lisette.

But the meeting between Lisette Bloch Kleinman and MJ Tanner isn’t a fight or a reckoning. Rather, it’s more of a cautious reunion and serves as a transition to the middle third of the book.

Graceanne Davis Mason Brown Tanner

MJ’s relationship with her stepmother does not start out well. But they grow on each other and eventually come to a deep understanding and even mutual love and affection.

Some of their understanding hinges on MJ getting along better with Graceanne’s son, Hal. But another aspect of it is Graceanne accepting that MJ and Sid are never going to convert, and she should just stop trying and accept them the way they are.

Sid Tanner

MJ’s brother is a sensible, down to earth accounting student who got their mother’s looks and, therefore, looks stereotypically Jewish. This has resulted in him having been bullied in school and threatened by antisemites.

But MJ, who essentially can ‘pass’ for gentile, does not suffer this until high school…

Hal Brown, Jr.

… Except for at the hands of Hal. When MJ meets her future stepbrother, he threatens her and refers to Sid by a slur. But MJ can hold her own and kicks him in the shins before running to tell Walt.

And, because Hal demands that MJ do his homework for him, MJ asks Walt and Graceanne if she can be paid to tutor Hal, figuring she may as well make some money off him.

But tutoring Hal turns out to be harder than it would appear at first blush, as he is dyslexic and likely also has a degree of autism and/or ADHD. Being able to reach and truly help him leads to them finally being able to bury the hatchet.

Will Tanner

When Graceanne and Walt have a son together, MJ is of the ideal age to babysit. It being the mid-1960s, she entertains the baby by singing along to the songs on the radio, including Wooly Bully.

Ariel Kleinman

I don’t have a lot on MJ and Ariel’s direct relationship. The half-sister from Lisette’s second marriage is part of the glue that holds this whole patchwork family together.

The Brady Bunch, they ain’t.

The OG Snowy and Edge of Seventeen Snowy

Two of MJ Tanner’s most important relationships are with two separate dogs. The original (OG) Snowy is her heart dog, and she feels as deeply for him as she does for her human family.

The Edge is the seventeenth dog her family names Snowy. And while he’s not quite her heart dog, he’s almost a reincarnation of the original.

Conflict and Turning Point

With several turning points in the overall story, there are several for MJ.

Probably the three biggest are when her mother leaves, when she defends Graceanne, and when Addison Acreage threatens the farm.

The secondary three are most likely when MJ is first confronted with antisemitism, when she and Jim get together, and when she has to start facing her own mortality.

There are more, and then whole story really belongs to her. But those are some of the biggest conflicts and changes in her life.

Continuity/Easter Eggs

MJ shows up in the mega, massive crossover, Timelines are Alive with, of all people, her eventual brother-in-law, Joe Crowley, jr.

Future Plans for MJ Tanner

I’m not so sure that I have future plans for ole MJ. Without getting too heavily into spoiler territory, a lot of her life is already on the page.

MJ Tanner: Takeaways

I truly, madly, and deeply love this character.

Click to buy Untrustworthy on Amazon Her voice is as strong as those of Ceilidh O’Malley, Craig Firenze, Josie James, and Peri Martin.

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Self-Review – Side by Side

A Review of Side by Side

Come on in and check out the somewhat creepy Side by Side.

I wrote this story during the second quarter of 2020. I do not recall any particular prompt word or phrase. And I do not believe there ever was one.

Background

The idea of being able to see alternate timelines did not really mature in my writing until I started to write the Time Addicts trilogy and embody the whole shebang into the character Josie James. So, in a way, this is almost a trial run for the concept.

Because if anyone ever had to, truly, live their life this way, they would be constantly tripping and running into things!

As a result of that obvious issue, I retooled the idea considerably before finally settling on how Josie would actually see and experience the other timelines. This also meant removing her from a detached observer situation and instead turning her into a somewhat active semi-participant.

Plot for Side by Side

Rather than much of a plot, the story (such as it is) consists of the narrator explaining their ability to essentially see an alternate timeline.

The narrator sees in a kind of split screen, and so they are able to see the points of divergence as they occur.

Characters

The characters are just the unnamed narrator and whoever they are talking to.

Memorable Quotes

I have been able to do this ever since I could remember. In fact, until I was in school, I didn’t realize that other people couldn’t do it, too.

I have different vision in each eye. And that’s not too terribly remarkable, I know. I get that. But it’s not because my nose is in the way or a difference in visual acuity like with most people.

Instead, for me, I see a different scene with each eye. Now, you may be wondering just how I could go through life without falling flat on my face every moment of every day. But it’s not as if I see London with one eye and Timbuktu with the other or anything.

The truth is that I see the same external scenes. And no, I haven’t just lied to you. Rather, the difference is not in the scenery, not for the most part. I see the same tree, the same street, and the same clouds, probably the same as anyone else.

The difference is that I see two different versions of the present. They aren’t too terribly different from each other, and very often they are virtually indistinguishable. In my left eye, I might see a woman walking toward me wearing a red shirt. And in the right, she might be wearing a blue shirt. I’ve asked people with me, and they have confirmed it’s always the right side that is, well, right. The shirt doesn’t split the difference; it’s not purple. And no one else sees the red.

Just me.

Rating for Side by Side

The story has a K rating. While the end of a timeline can be messy and concerning, there is nothing really on-screen.

In addition, the reader can almost chalk it all up to a hallucination on the part of the narrator.

Takeaways

I kind of like the idea of there being some way to see a pair of timelines, and to watch the convergence. But at the same, heh, time, it would be rather nerve-wracking to watch another version of the human race in the process of utterly destroying themselves.

Also, as noted above, I believe that converting this experience from detached observations to proto-active participation makes for a more compelling storyline. Which would follow, seeing as I am a far better writer these days!

Side by Side is on Wattpad, where you can read it in its entirety.

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Self-Review – Bet on Marnie

Let’s Look at Bet on Marnie

How did Mariana Shapiro Chase get into space? She had to beat the odds. But never count her out. Always bet on Marnie.

I wrote this story during the fourth quarter of 2024. It is the first story that I designated as #30Day50K. It serves as a prequel to The Enigman Cave. One thing that I am rather pleased with is that it bolsters the main storyline rather nicely.

And, with some of the storyline covered here, I can probably edit the original a lot more ruthlessly. Which, I am certain, is a really good idea.

When I am through with both of these stories, they will most likely look a lot different.

Background

To make my life easier as I continue to try to come up with a detailed and reasonable third Obolonk trilogy, I decided to write prequels for my major properties. These would work from 2022 until at least 2025 and potentially into 2026 or 2027.

Hey, I can find all sorts of fun ways to procrastinate, heh.

Plot

Marnie’s life takes a turn as she gets into Deep Space Training School while her marriage founders. Complicating matters is the fact that the government, which runs the school, has superficial preferences for people who are young and pretty.

But they don’t know Marnie.

Characters

The characters are Marnie Shapiro Chase, Ben Chase, Harrison N’Beki, Patricia (Trixie) LaRue, Rosa Perrault, Missy Mahoney, Don Chandler, and a number of candidates for deep space exploration.

Memorable Quotes {This is the First Time We See Ben Chase}

It was nearly three in the morning when she heard the sound of the front door unlocking in response to Ben inserting his key card.

She got up and met him in the front hall. “Well?”

“Well, what?” Ben slurred. He reeked of scotch and soda.

If you weren’t so damned fine-looking, I’d have had it out with you long ago. “Well, where have you been?”

“You didn’t get my texts?”

To humor him, she checked her tablet. “The most recent text from you is from four days ago. Your ultra-romantic message was that you wanted me to pick up Cornish game hens.”

“Oh. Well, then it was a voice mail.” Ben staggered into the house. Mariana shut the door behind him as he lurched for the bathroom.

Mariana pressed on the tan card on her lanyard, and it lit up for a moment. It was an amber color, signifying older messages but nothing since she had last checked. “My last voice mail from you was from a week ago. You told me you didn’t want to go to Hilton Head, and I quote, ‘Deal with that kid.’ You’re so paternal.” God, I hope you can recognize sarcasm in your current state. But I’m not holding my breath on that.

“Maybe it was a, an email. Yes, that’s what they’re called. Did you move the toilet, or something?”

Mariana got behind him. She took him by the shoulders and marched him into the bathroom. “No, I did not move the toilet, for fuck’s sake. You are totally plastered, Ben.” God, I hope you’re not going to get sick on me. The last time you did, I had to get robotic help to clean up the place.

Rating for Bet on Marnie

The story has a T rating. There are a few moments, including a few with people being found in flagrante delicto. Plus, there’s some swearing, including in the sample, above. So, if such things bother you, proceed at your own risk, I suppose.

Takeaways for Bet on Marnie

I like this story a lot, and I feel it conveys a lot of what the actual deep space program is like. Plus, it delves deeply into Marnie and Ben’s marriage in a way that I didn’t do so when I was originally writing The Enigman Cave.

And as I look at it, it strikes me that, first off, I can edit out quite a bit of it. There is quite simply way too much detail on the courses they take. But at the same time, I believe there are likely to be places where scenes or quotes can work with either story.

Hence, editing both may turn out to be something I do at the same time. And, I suspect each will trade with the other, almost making two different stories. We shall see.

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Self-Review – Dinosaurs

Let’s Look at Dinosaurs

Let’s take a look at Dinosaurs. In this case, I used the prompt term to mean ‘obsolete things or people’, rather than actual thunder lizards.

I wrote this story during the second quarter of 2018.

Background for Dinosaurs

With a bit of an eye toward, if I recall correctly, the book version of 2001, I wanted to show a kind of a metamorphosis, from a mechanical existence to a spiritual one.

In the future, a species starts to become more and more dependent upon machines for the necessities of life. I don’t mean to deliver groceries or to prepare medicine so much. Rather, I mean to help them walk, talk, eat, and even think.

It’s a little like some of the earlier parts of the old Zager and Evans hit, In the Year 2525.

Is that species ourselves? I never actually say so. But it most certainly could be.

You decide, sports fans.

Plot for Dinosaurs

There is not too much of a plot to this one. Rather, it is more of a description of what should feel a little like the next stage of our own development.

Or at least the next stage for the development of the Utromi from Mettle.

Characters

The characters are really just the people who have made it to the next, perhaps final, stage of their development. But there are no names, genders, ages, races, or any other identifying marks.

So, how do they tell one another apart? Frankly, I haven’t got the foggiest notion.

Memorable Quotes from Dinosaurs

You see them everywhere, if you look closely enough. The rusty, dusty hulks of what once was gleaming, new, beautiful, and important. You’re floating down a street and wham! You practically run into one of them. It’s a wonder they can move at all.

For us, things are different. We are strong and wise, gleaming and fantastic. We are superior to those dusty relics in every single way that counts, and probably in others that don’t count so much, too.

What is even more amazing and difficult to believe is that we once were them. There as a time when we were as faded and fragile and imperfect as they are now.

The change happens in all sorts of ways. There doesn’t seem to be any sort of a regular pattern to it. One day, you’re a dinosaur of a creature. The next day, you’re one of us, ethereal and opalescent. Or it takes longer, as your dull parts start to shine until you literally leave your old existence in the dust.

Rating

The story has a K rating. While the narrator is describing what by all rights should feel like death, the description is a joyous one. They welcome the changes, and hope others will as well.

Takeaways

I love how this one ends hopefully, that the inevitable death of a species can merely be the start of something new. You know, like the chrysalis brings forth the butterfly, even as the caterpillar thinks it’s the end of the world.

Perhaps the human race will be so lucky, eh? We can only hope.

And finally, Dinosaurs is on Wattpad, where you can read it in its entirety.


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Self-Review – Beacon: A Light Shines in Gloucester

Let’s Look at Beacon: A Light Shines in Gloucester

I write a lot of apocalyptic stories. In a way, they’re easier when you’re struggling to fulfill a personal commitment to write every single day. But the best part about Beacon: A Light Shines in Gloucester is that, unlike a lot of my post-apocalyptic stories, it’s actually hopeful.

This puts it in a class similar to Alix’s Apocalypse.

I wrote this story during the third quarter of 2021.

Background

The original prompt word was beacon. So, it immediately made me think of lighthouses. And, the closest lighthouse to my home is (I believe) in Gloucester, Massachusetts.

A Light Shines in Gloucester with the Plot

After an apocalyptic disaster, the unnamed narrator goes to Gloucester, Massachusetts, in order to occupy the lighthouse. They want to see what there is to be seen. And so, they hope, to be seen by someone else out there.

But there may not be anyone else.

Characters from Beacon: A Light Shines in Gloucester

The characters are just the narrator, and a stray dog they have named Sally. The narrator most likely is wholly unaware as to whether there are any other human beings alive at all on planet Earth.

As a result, the reader does not know this rather vital bit of information, either.

Memorable Quotes

When it all went to hell in a handcart, I escaped to Gloucester, to the old Annisquam Lighthouse. Built in 1801, I understand, and 45 feet tall.

I survived and my appetite came back. I headed into town and got supplies. Canned goods. Seeds. Boxed food. Rope. Batteries. Alcohol, of course.

Found a dog there. I guess she didn’t want to run off or was too old or too loyal. No collar. I’ve been calling her Sally.

Rating

The story has a K rating. While this short story is all about the aftermath of a truly horrific disaster, nothing untoward happens ‘on screen’ (as it were).

Takeaways for Beacon: A Light Shines in Gloucester

There is not very much to this one. And that is unfortunate, for I can see where this one does have some potential. After all, there is the very real possibility that the narrator could end up signaling someone (or some kind of a thing) that she most certainly does not wish to find.

Protect Sally at all costs!


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Self-Review – Scavenger Hunt at Lanterman’s Mill

Let’s Look at Scavenger Hunt at Lanterman’s Mill

Would you go on a scavenger hunt at Lanterman’s Mill? And where the heck is Lanterman’s Mill, anyway? Not to worry, dear reader. I will reveal all.

I started this story during the third quarter of 2021. But I did not finish it until the first quarter of 2025. Or maybe early in the second quarter of 2025.

Background for Scavenger Hunt at Lanterman’s Mill

The original prompt word was Youngstown. I’ve been to Ohio before, but never actually to Youngstown. And so, I had to open up Google maps and try to figure out what would be interesting enough in the town to write about.

Also, I love cryptic crosswords, so the idea of making a cryptic clue was a lot of fun! Did you guess what ‘shift maternalism, almost nil’ means (see below)?

Plot

It’s a cool ten million dollars at stake when Liz and her family go on a scavenger hunt sponsored by a hardware store. And when Liz finds… something, tempers start to flare.

Characters

The characters are Liz Crosby (the narrator), her brother in law Chuck Rafferty, her nephew Wesley, Chuck’s pal Jerry Nance, and Jerry’s second wife, Lisa Foster Nance. Liz mentions her sister Natalie and infant niece Deirdre, but they aren’t along for the scavenger hunt.

There’s also Mike Rawlings, the CEO of the hardware store. And Penny Delgado, from Youngstown Action News.

Memorable Quotes

This is the stupidest scavenger hunt I’ve ever been on. And I’ve been on quite a few.

It’s not the old town
Water takes a trip
Shift maternalism, almost nil
The bridge wears a hat
The gorges are gorgeous

I figured out it was Youngstown, Ohio. But the gorge clue made the rest of my team think Ithaca. So, they’re there, and I’m here.

But I have no idea about the water. I guess it means a creek or a river or stream. If it’s a river, then it’s the Mahoning. And after that, I’m stumped—100%, totally, grade A stumped. This sure is a lot of work for $10 million.

Rating

The story has a K rating.

Takeaways from this Scavenger Hunt

While everyone else is going nuts in one way or another, Liz manages to keep her cool. But maybe a little unnaturally. If I ever really revisit this one, I may add an instance or two where even Liz becomes unraveled. Hmm.


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