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Writing Exposition

Exposition Should Be Your Superpower

This is because exposition works.

First of all, exposition basically means a literary device intended to describe a character’s background, or “our story so far”. It can be done elegantly, with flashbacks or dialogue or even a character finding something or other.

It can be clunky, like when characters say, “As you know, …” and then proceed to clue in the reader but then tell the other characters everything they should, logically, already know. For example, one doctor telling another one how chemotherapy works would denote really clunky exposition.

Clunkiness was rather memorably skewered by the Basil Exposition character in Austin Powers, International Man of Mystery. However, you and I don’t want that to happen with our works. So we’ve got to try to be a lot more eloquent. Hence we’ve got to figure out how to clue in our readers in a more natural fashion. So consider your setting.

Using Settings for Exposition

What do I mean by this? Your story’s circumstances and your characters’ specifics might be places to sneak in some background. Are they spies? Spies get briefings. Are they museum goers? Museums have docents (specialized guides) and tours, and they also have guidebooks and even identification for paintings or artifacts. Hikers use trails. Motorists use maps (or GPS, if the time period is right).

There is nothing wrong with a character reading a street sign, either out loud or to themselves.

Here Now the News

Love or hate it, but a character reading a newspaper or listening to radio news or watching it on television can provide a level of exposition to your story which can be seamless and even elegant.

Chapter Titles

When your chapter title is Sunday, August 6, 2017, 11 AM, San Francisco Chinatown, you get across a ton of information in a very short space. And you do so without interrupting the flow of the story unnecessarily.

Character Names and Occupations

These are more subtle, but if your characters have names like Maria, Vito, Anna, Guido, and Antonio, your reader will think Italy or at least an Italian family. If your characters have occupations such as blacksmith, miller, alchemist, and barber surgeon, your reader will think of medieval times.

The New Guy

There is a damned fine reason why a lot of television pilots involve someone coming to a new city or starting a new job. This is because explaining the story and the plot and characters to the new kid in town is perfectly natural.

“Excuse me, but where’s the spaceship parking bay?”

“Oh, it’s next to the mess hall. I’m Dave; I do the regular run to Venus every Thursday.”

It’s natural, it flows, and it doesn’t bog down the story.

Interweaving Exposition

Yet another method is to weave the exposition into the story or the dialog.

“You have great eyes. I love that color blue.”

“My mom always said they looked like the ocean. But I grew up in Kansas and I confess I didn’t see the ocean until I was thirty.”

Or

“You look like hell.” She nodded toward the wound on his arm.

“Oh, you should see the other guy.”

Get it?

Exposition, Scenes, and Character Descriptions

While not 100% the same as character descriptions, your standard bit of exposition is really just another flavor of describing … something. And while it’s a problem if the only time you describe people is when they aren’t white, it’s less of an issue when you don’t go into detail about something we should already know.

A modern day city is likely to have streets with traffic, perhaps outdoor vendors, maybe office buildings, and definitely crowds of people. Mainly, you may need to separate Philadelphia from Mumbai, or the like. For God’s sake, read some maps (and make sure they are for the correct year!) before describing a city you don’t know.

Hell, do that even for a city that you do know. And let me make one thing perfectly clear. Try not to turn it into a travelogue. I can practically guarantee to you that, unless they work there or are showing a tourist around, New Yorkers do not go waltzing into the Empire State Building all the time.

Takeaways

Exposition is truly vital in writing but you need to get it across without a dump of information. Read back your exposition. If it reads like a text book, or it goes on for too long, see about changing it but also about breaking it up. A bit of exposition here and there, even if it’s the same amount as in your big info dump, will stick out a lot less.

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Writing a Blurb

Are You in the Thinking About Writing a Blurb?

Have you ever written a blurb for a book? Here’s how.

You Have GOT to Grab the Reader’s Attention

The most effective blurbs are:

• short
† specific as to genre (never be coy; if it’s horror, then say so!)
• open about who the protagonist is
† spoiler-free
• not a rehash of the first chapter or the entire plot
† neutral about the quality of your work (don’t say: this is an incredible book. Your saying that does not make it so. Sorry.)

So keep in mind – these are not the same as the summary you write for a query.

Blurb Samples

In this fantasy tale, Dorothy is whisked away by a twister to an unknown magical land. But first she has to deal with the quite literal fallout of her house landing on, and killing, a wicked witch.

Blurbs give us an idea about the story, and they make us want to read more. Also, a blurb for The Wizard of Oz would likely be longer than the above. The idea would be to better reflect the work’s complexity and length. It would likely cover more than just the opening scenes.

While a long book does not need to have a long blurb, it at least could conceivably support one. However, a short novel probably would not.

Unless, of course, you’ve written The Great Gatsby or To Kill a Mockingbird.

Spoiler alert: you probably have not.

Yet.
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Some More Blurb Samples

Reclusive millionaire Jay Gatsby leads the good life in 1920s New York. As his friend Nick Carraway watches, Gatsby’s life takes a turn with the arrival of the all-too appealing yet all-too married Daisy Buchanan.

Or –

Scout and Jem Finch live in Alabama with their widowed father, Atticus, the town’s leading lawyer. It’s the 1930s, and Maycomb seems far from sophistication or enlightenment.

And so the trouble starts when a black man is accused of raping a white woman – and Scout’s father agrees to defend the accused.

Get in Some Practice

We all have to start somewhere, and we have all got to practice.

Yes, even you.

This is a skill like any other. Or, rather, it is unlike any other. And a lot of us can become paralyzed with fear and self-doubt when we try. That is totally understandable.

After all, a lot is riding on just a simple blurb.

So, start small.

I honestly think practicing on classic novels is a good idea. It’s not fraught with meaning because you’re not trying to sell anything.

In fact, I bet it would make a pretty cool game. That is, write a blurb, don’t give away the title, and then ask the other player to Name That Book.

Takeaways

Practicing on works that are not your own can help you get started. It’s a lot easier because there is nothing riding on writing a blurb for a novel you did not write.

Get in some practice and give yourself some grace. It won’t be perfect immediately. But much like with an elevator pitch, you’ll find that the more you practice, the better you get at it.

Back to you.

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Reading the Writing Social Signals

What are Social Signals?

The social media landscape is vast and varied. But one thing the sites all seem to have in common is algorithms. And those algorithms work by way of counting and weighing what are called social signals.

In our offline lives, we emit social signals all the time although some are muddier than others. If you proactively join your school’s alumni association, then you are emitting a signal which says you value either your education or your school or maybe the friends you made there.

When you insist on referring to yourself as Doctor … then you are also discharging a signal.

Other signals come from our choices of everything from mates to dining establishments to screen names or even to how we decorate.

Let’s Go Online

So, the truth is that the way social signals get an interpretation depends, in large part, on whether you’re a human or a bot/computer.

So, let’s look at both means of interpretation in turn.

Social Signals for People

Human beings are essentially wired to prefer what the group likes. And there is a very good, evolution-style reason for this! Fitting into a group means you have help with everything from child rearing to food gathering.

Yes, of course there are hermits out there. And the crowd is not always right. Not by any stretch of the imagination. And when a crowd turns into an angry mob, well, all bets are off.

But as a species we love popularity. And, at the same time, we also love positive things. Usually. So, if everyone else loves X, then we can often feel the need to check out X, whatever it may be. Signals of positive appreciation are meaningful to us.

These signals include:

† Star rating systems
• Rankings
† Number of positive reviews
• A lack (or a dearth) of negative reviews
† Endorsements from people we listen to and admire
• Shelf space or “want to read” lists
† Prominence on a shelf or in a collection
• Number of followers/admitted readers

An online seller or social media platform will often put its virtual thumb on the scale. Hence, a certain number of reviews of any stripe might result in Amazon delivering your book to more pages.

Also, rankings are likely to generate more suggestions for readers. E.g. if you liked X, you should check out Y.

Apart from newness and uniqueness, this is the way many algorithms work online.

Rankings on Amazon in particular also offer up another signal—the happy orange ribbon that says “#1 bestseller”. Amazon also gathers together bestsellers for their own grouping, which is at the top—prime real estate.

How to Use ‘Em

To take advantage of some of these signals, watch your rankings on Amazon. If you ever hit #1, take screenshots! You can easily use them in your marketing materials.

In April, 2023, my book was #1 in the ___ category. And then just add the screenshot to whatever you like—tweet, FB post, newsletter, blog post, Instagram image, etc. Even a year later, that can still look impressive.

And no one really needs to know that your genre is tiny and your category is even tinier.

This is one manner of leveraging the signals. Further down, I’ll get into some more ideas. But for now, let’s turn to the bots.

Bots/Apps/Algorithms/Search Engines/Computers

I’ve already alluded to some of this. If there is a line of code in the algorithm that says something like feed more profiles this book if there are a lot of reviews — it’s probably going to be very numbers-oriented. The code (in English) would be something like:

If a book has 10 reviews, feed the info to 5% more profiles. Change to 10% profiles if there are 30 reviews. For 100 reviews, change to 25% more profiles. And for 1,000 reviews, double the number of pages where the info is fed.

Are these numbers accurate? Probably not. And I am deliberately being somewhat vague here because Amazon and any other site guards these secrets closely—and they test and change them, anyway.

But no matter what, a bot or other non-human won’t be able to follow social signals unless they are extremely well-defined.

Another signal, in addition to the ones above, is tags.

Tag, Tag, What is a Tag?

It’s a subcategorization system more than anything else. When Amazon was first in business, it’s highly likely that no one had come up with the idea of anything like Pride and Prejudice and Zombies.

So, when it was published, where was Amazon supposed to put it? With Austen’s Regency romances? With Stephen King’s horror? Miscellaneous?

The answer to both may very well be yes. And with proper tagging, readers can find it. Also, they can get an idea of what’s inside the book. If someone needs a trigger warning, tags (and even categories) can provide some assistance to readers.

Proper tags and categories clue in readers. They also provide a means of comparison. If you loved Pride and Prejudice and Zombies, you might like Abraham Lincoln, Vampire Slayer. But it’s less likely (albeit not impossible) that you’d like a pair of fuzzy slippers for your dog.

Leveraging Social Signals

First and foremost, ask for reviews! I found that the best thing to do was to respond to people. That is, if someone messaged me and said they liked Untrustworthy, then I asked them to review it. And I made it clear—even a short review is fine.

For people who would not review (or even didn’t like it!), I just asked them to rate a review as helpful to them. Whichever review it was, even a somewhat negative one, that would work for me.

On an Amazon author page, shoppers can sort by (among other methods) number of reviews and average customer review. Making it possible for shoppers to view my list of works a few different ways is, in a way, another of the social signals.

It creates a bit of novelty, and that attracts people. We’re also hard-wired to like variety and novelty.

Sales drive up rankings. But rankings can fall fast. So, why not talk to people who have expressed an interest in buying your book? Ask if they’ll buy within a particular time frame, or if they’ll preorder (yet another of the social signals!).

Offer a discount for a limited time. Any of these can, legitimately and ethically, drive up sales.

And, in turn, sales will drive up rankings.

Beyond Amazon, social signals also take the shape of likes on Facebook, retweets on Twitter, and even reblogging on Tumblr.

Speed, positivity, and novelty are your best friends, when it comes to social signaling.

Takeaways

Ethics are paramount. Don’t jack up social signals as a means to cheat readers or platforms. But there is nothing wrong with having good timing. Oh, and your characters? You can even use a character questionnaire to try to inform their virtual, fictional social signals as well.

Social Signals — can YOU read them? #amwriting


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Can a Character Questionnaire Help Inspire You?

What is a Character Questionnaire, and Why Might You Want One?

At its essence, a character questionnaire is a set of questions about a character. Seems obvious, right? Master Class has a good one.

A character questionnaire is not strictly necessary when putting together characters. But it can be very helpful. This is particularly the case if you are early in the process and still getting to know a character.

Some questionnaires seem to be overly complex. Or the questions address one area of a character’s personality in depth but not others.

Hence you will want to add some depth but probably some randomness as well. So, let’s look at the whole thing in pieces.

Here are some questions which might help.

Background

Of course you want to know some basics about the character. What is their name, and how old are they during the story? Gender is often important. But sexuality may or may not be. Educational level is probably also something you want to know.

• Name
† Date of birth
• Gender assigned at birth/current gender if different
† Sexuality
• Height (consider if you need English or metric measurements for this and weight)
† Weight
• Educational level
† Siblings, if any
• Place in the birth order (if applicable)
† Whether parents or other close relatives are still alive
• Socio-economic background

Details for Your Own Personal Character Questionnaire

There’s more to a name than just … the name. Was your character named after someone? Are they a junior, a senior, a seventeenth? Are they, perhaps, named for someone in popular culture (either a fictional character or an actor)?

Beyond going into horoscopes, a date of birth can inform a few things, not just whether someone is the eldest in a group.

After all, if like me your character was born in early September, then if they’re in the modern world, school probably started right about the time of their birthdays.

Gender, gender roles, and gender changes all matter. If a person has body dimorphism, that is far different from if they just don’t like being (for example) female and upset that society keeps them from making more money.

Height is more than just a yardstick. It’s also whether your character can reach stuff on high shelves or needs to duck through doorways. It’s whether they work as a jockey or gymnast or ballerina, or they end up pitching in baseball games or on the basketball team.

And height can often play a role in job opportunities, leadership roles, and relationships.

Weight? These days, you can be rather quickly and unfairly judged about your weight. People will also often judge a person’s class, educational background, and income based on their weight. Is it fair? Of course not. But it’s realistic and it should find a place in your writing.

More Details

Educational level will inform how a character speaks, and perhaps also what you have them read, assuming they’re literate, that is. Are they quick on the uptake? Do they solve the puzzle first—or should they?

Siblings and place in birth order can give you an idea of whether a character feels overly responsible, or seems horribly spoiled, or doesn’t feel like they belong anywhere.

Parents—living or dead—will loom large. Is your character estranged from their parents? Orphaned? Is Mom or Dad in jail? Did the character kill one of them? Was one of them deadbeat, never known by your character? Or is your character adopted?

Socio-economic background can inform your character’s opportunities in life. It can also define if their growth was stunted, if they hoard food, or if they waste money and are used to servants catering to their every whim.

Relationship Queries

Even if a piece is not a romance, understanding a character’s relationship history can prove fruitful. Here are a few details to consider.

† First serious relationship
• Also, consider the first serious relationship after coming out, if applicable
† Marital status
• Have they ever been in love?
† Are they ace/aero (asexual or aromantic)?
• Do they let anyone get close to them?
† Do they have any kinks?

Details

Beyond the parental and sibling relationships listed above, how does your character relate to anyone they’re interested in romantically? How serious did they get, and how soon? Are they a virgin? If not, when did they lose their virginity? Are they happy with that?

Is their sexuality set or fluid? Or is it repressed or so closeted that they don’t even realize they’re closeted?

Have they ever been married? Divorced, separated, or widowed? If so, what was the wedding like? Was the marriage happy? Functional? Abusive?

Have they ever loved anyone? Was it romantic? Chaste? From afar? Unrequited? Or was it some borderline stalking?

Has anyone ever gotten close to them? Also, are they vanilla, or are they in a dom/sub situation, or something else?

Work and School

Again, even if you never show work or education, it will help to inform the piece. So, consider details such as the following:

• Highest level of education attained
† Age when classes ended (that is, were they a dropout, or did they graduate?)
• Current employment
† Industry
• Basic tasks/duties
† If a supervisor/manager, number of direct and indirect reports

Details for This Part of Your Character Questionnaire

So, can you call your character doctor or professor? Or are they even literate? Did they drop out to help the family or because they were failing?

Where do they work, or are they unemployed? If they’re currently not working, are they trying to get a job, or not? Also, do they even need to work? Are they perhaps an unpaid caregiver of some sort?

If they work outside the home (so, keep in mind that this is not necessarily literally for work from home and hybrid jobs), what’s the industry? Is it creative? Caregiving? Scientific? Something in business? Do they work with their hands?

When the working day ends, how tired are they? Are they injured? Or are they so stressed out they can barely see straight? How does the commute (if any) treat them?

Can anyone call your character boss? Also, what kind of a boss are they? Do they rule with an iron fist, or are they empathetic? Sexist? Absent? Strictly by the book? Someone with a huge HR file on them?

Favorites

So, after you’re about the age of eight or so, people stop asking you what your favorite dinosaur is. It’s as if they don’t even care! But you can always ask your characters!

Their faves can also include:

• Person
† Food
• Place
† Workout or place to walk
• Season
† Subject in school

And so on and on. Musicians can have a favorite guitar or glockenspiel. Carpenters can have a preferred hammer. The sky is literally the limit here.

Personality

Rather than listing various personality traits, it makes more sense to instead ask questions. Pretend as if you’re interviewing your character for some reason or another. Maybe it’s for a newspaper article, or a job. Whatever the pretense is, ask about things like:

• So, are you a morning or an evening person?
† In a group, do you lead, follow, check out, or something else?
• If you found a wallet full of money in the street, what would you do?
† Do you believe in God? Also, do you follow any religion?
• Who has been the most influential person in your life so far?
† What’s the most daring thing you have ever done? And would you ever do it again?
• How’s your mental health?
† If you could meet anyone from history, living or dead, who would you like to meet, and why?

Takeaways

So the truth is, the more you treat your characters like people, the more your readers will see them as people. Adding depth will also help you write them, and know when you’re having them say or do something out of character.

If you don’t know your characters, who else could possibly know them? So, ask!

Oh, and another thing. This kind of a questionnaire can even help you with getting story ideas. No lie!


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A character questionnaire can help. Just don’t treat it like gospel.

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How to Make Main Characters

Let’s look at how to create main characters.

Main Characters, the Lifeblood of any Story

Of course you have an MC, sometimes called a protagonist. Without one, then your book or short story is … what, exactly? A travelogue, perhaps. Or maybe it’s an instruction manual. Or maybe it’s just a mishmash. Because with no chief character, what are you doing, anyway?

Notice I Didn’t Say There Were No Characters

A bunch of characters can be lovely. But an utter lack of focus isn’t just odd. It’s also likely to be something that a reader would not like. The reader may be wondering—who is it I’m supposed to root for, anyway?

When that is not clear, it creates confusion. This kind of confusion gets readers to not finish. And it also gets publishers and agents to not want to pick it up. Therefore, you will need to create a focus and a point of view.

The Single Focus Character

In The Enigman Cave, Marnie Shapiro is such a singular focus that I felt I could not show anything ‘on screen’ unless she saw it. I even ended up tying myself in some knots to make certain that she “saw” something on the screen so I could include it.

But in The Real Hub of the Universe, while Ceilidh is the single focus character, I wasn’t as strict.

The Dual Mains

Or maybe I should refer to them as dueling mains? In the first Obolonk trilogy, Peri Martin is the main, but Tommy 2000 gives her something of a run for her money. We never really get inside Tommy’s head. But he’s there, in nearly every scene. He would have made for a fascinating POV character. But I preferred Peri, and I still do.

And unlike The Enigman Cave, there were a few moments where Peri is just not with it. Yet I still felt comfortable including it on screen.

Multiple Main Characters

Welcome to the Mettle Universe, where there are multiple points of view. The character who I showcase the most is Craig Firenze. He has the most chapters devoted to him—even though I had originally thought of Noah Braverman as the MC. But the characters, as they so often do, had other plans.

The easiest way to keep it all straight is what I did. That is, each chapter was for a different character’s point of view. For example, in more than one chapter, we’re inside Nell Murphy‘s head. And so, by definition, the italicized thoughts can only be hers. And, I don’t get into anyone else’s head. In order to be able to do that, the current chapter would have to end.

In some ways, a multitude of main characters meant that I needed to find a purpose for all of them. Therefore, for Mink’s only chapter, I get to tell what happened when she was separated from the rest of the group. It’s the only occasion that I had to convey that.

Getting into Olga Nicolaev’s point of view was also fun and key, because she goes through the story sounding like an illiterate most of the time. But the reality is, she’s rather sharp.

Perhaps the toughest POV to get into was Eleanor’s. I had to show not only her thoughts, but also how they jumbled and coalesced into, eventually, a form of coherence. This made her more of a main-ish character than she would have been. Otherwise, she’s just a burden on the group.

Main But Not Quite So Main After All

Within Mettle, the people with the most POV chapters are the true main characters. These are essentially Craig, Noah, Nell, Elise, and possibly Mei-Lin (she kind of straddles the line). But this group does not include Eleanor or Mink, as they each only have the one point of view chapter apiece. Dez and Olga kind of also straddle the line. And as for Kitty, she never gets a POV chapter.

Although I will most likely write one for her when I write the prequel for this one.

Hanging Back With Main Characters

How far into characters’ heads are you willing to go?

In Untrustworthy, I refer to Tathrelle and Ixalla’s thoughts, but I never actually show them on screen. Peri was originally like that, but I have decided I prefer being deeper in her head. Same with Josie. But with Marnie, I never get that far into her head. With Ceilidh, I do, but like with Peri it was because I changed my mind and opted for a more intimate relationship.

With the multiple POV characters of Mettle, I held back. But that’s also a choice for clarity’s sake. With so many people, getting into heads would mean that readers would not necessarily immediately realize whose head they were in.

Details and Whatnot

You do not have to go overboard with details. In fact, in the Twilight books, there’s a conscious effort not to overly describe Bella Swan. Why? Because that way, just about any girl can picture herself in Bella’s shoes. This was a big part of the success of that series.

Should you do that? Or should you describe every nuance of your main characters? There is more than one school of thought. What it all boils down to is—you do you.

But make sure that your descriptions and inner voices have a meaning and a purpose to the overall story line. Telling your readers that your MC has split ends is probably too much. Unless, of course, that turns into some sort of a plot point.

And for gosh sake’s, don’t just describe people of color. This gives forth an extremely strong impression that you feel your POC characters are different and, perhaps, do not quite belong. Keeping white as the default is not a good look, for either you or your characters, main or otherwise.

Anchor your prose with main characters who feel real to your readers.

And never forget to have fun with it!

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How to Make Characters (Side Characters)

Do You Want to Know How to Make Characters for Your Writing?

There are all sorts of ways to make characters. But no matter what, a character with more than a few lines (e. g. the barista at a coffee shop where our heroes go to decompress) need a reason for existing. For any character which isn’t a main one, the questions tend to be:

• How does this character relate to the main character?
† Do they showcase them, make them look better or worse?
• Help them grow?
† Kick off the action (inciting incident)?
• Amp up the conflict?
† Work to facilitate exposition?
• Enable the ending (including HEA if appropriate)?
† Love interest? Or the one that got away?
• Bring the story to its climax/crisis?

Characters which don’t do at least one of these things need to be changed, nixed, or combined.

In my 2016 NaNo, for example, Devon Grace and Alexander help drive plot and exposition and Devon in particular helps to facilitate the ending. Jake is the love interest; Frances Miller and Bessie both showcase the MC; Johnny kicks off the inciting incident, etc.

Make Characters Believable

But add in too many quirks, and characters just plain will not feel real. Instead, they will feel like a mishmash of characteristics and foibles.

Also, too many perfect bits threaten to convert any character into the dreaded Mary Sue. So does an author insertion. Although you’d be hard-pressed to find books where the author doesn’t get into it in some way.

Long as things are imperfect.

But!

The reverse is also true. That is, if you make characters with so many flaws and horrid tragic backstories that they are just like the biblical Job, then those, too, are a form of Mary Sue.

And don’t think for a minute that this is confined to just female characters and authors. There are a ton of Marty Stu characters out there as well.

Make Characters Better Than Mary Sue

Strive for a balance, if you can. Ask yourself: would this character be the kind of person I would just want to punch in the mouth for existing? If so, then you might have a Mary Sue on your hands.

I (for real) had a sorority sister who was kind of like this. Now, being unflappable is one thing. But this girl was cheerful and enthusiastic in the face of nearly anything. While, of course, the rest of us had problems and dreams and were imperfect.

So yes, Little Miss Perfect (or Mister Perfect) can absolutely exist in real life. But they are hardly the stuff of believable fiction. Even a character based on a real life Marty Stu should have some sort of flaw or issue. Or at least a comeuppance.

How Does the Character Relate to Your MC (Main Character)?

Let’s set aside how to make characters who are the focus for a moment. What are the sidekicks and side chicks like?

As I noted, they should have some sort of a point for the plot. But let’s distinguish a character with a purpose versus a fill-in character necessary but not important. Here’s an example.

In the second of the books in the first Obolonk trilogy (The Polymer Beat), and in the third (The Badge of Humanity), main character Peri Martin spends some time in the Washington Megalopolis on a few separate occasions.

In the second in particular, she hangs out with Greg Shapiro. Greg is a character who requires some depth. He serves a few purposes: expository mouthpiece and ending enabler.

But in the third book, Peri spends some time in a coffee shop. There is a barista there to take her order and make her coffee. But do we really care what the barista looks like? Not really. I think I just describe her as a young woman of Asian extraction. And that’s enough.

Unless I had made it a self-serve place, the coffeehouse needed a barista. But that person could be anyone.

What if You Create Characters That Deserve a Promotion?

Side characters can be fun to write. You can pour a lot into them, and the stakes feel lower. They feel like a place where a writer can experiment. But sometimes they are so vital that they steal the show.

What happens when you realize the side character really should be the main one?

In the novel Untrustworthy, that went down (a bit) in that side character Ixalla turned from an expository mouthpiece into a driver of the action and a facilitator of the ending. Frankly, I found I preferred writing her to Tathrelle, the actual main character.

Now, that book suffers from some head-hopping. I get the reader into Tathrelle’s head for the most part, but also into Ixalla’s at times.

For me, the trick was to keep the balance tilted a lot more heavily toward Tathrelle’s point of view. It was only when I could not use Tathrelle that Ixalla’s POV came front and center.

Another instance is Trinity Hawthorne in Time Addicts. Trini isn’t much of a side character. But I realized I wanted to write a prequel to serve the entire Obolonk universe. And so, I turned to Trini to run that particular show. She also fits in particularly well vis a vis the year.

Character Interactions and Intersections

When you use a method such as the snowflake novel writing method, the intersections of characters are at the forefront of creation. I have also found that it helps me to avoid creating a character who is unmoored from the MC.

Make your side characters work for you!


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Writing Progress Report – First Quarter 2023

Progress Report – First Quarter 2023

How was first quarter 2023 for writing? So, I spent the first quarter 2023 working on this blog and website. Then there was some editing as well. So there was that… But much like fourth quarter 2022, I focused on only a few things.

First Quarter 2023 Posted Works

First of all, I worked on a number of new short stories. A lot of these had been drafted on paper and so I spent some time fixing and polishing them.

This included 1960s Temporal Crimes.

Then on Wattpad I posted on the WattNaNo profile and the Star Trek Fans profile, and nowhere else.

Milestones

Also, I have written over 3.4 million words (fan fiction and wholly original fiction combined). So right now my stats on Wattpad for wholly original works are as follows:

• Dinosaurs – 42 reads, 11 comments
† How to NaNoWriMo – 26,027 reads, 340 comments
• My Favorite Things (like kibble) – 983 reads, 133 comments
Revved Up – 59,452 reads, 531 comments
• Side By Side – 20 reads, 2 comments
† Social Media Guide for Wattpad – 15,953 reads, 592 comments. This is under my actual name, Janet Gershen-Siegel.
• The Canadian Caper – 506 reads, 37 comments
The Dish – 250 reads, 24 comments
There is a Road – 189 reads, 28 comments
† WattNaNo’s Top Picks 2018 – 1,975 reads, 45 comments
• WattNaNo’s Top Picks 2019 – 1,848 reads, 10 comments
† What Now? – 2,812 reads, 104 comments

More Published Works as of First Quarter 2023

Also, I am amassing quite the collection of published works!

Untrustworthy, which is my first published novel. So yay!

A True Believer in Skepticism, published in Mythic Magazine.

Almost Shipwrecked, a story in the January 2019 edition of Empyreome, a site which unfortunately is no more.

Canaries, a short story in the March 29, 2019, edition of Theme of Absence.

Complications, a story in the Queer Sci Fi Discovery anthology. So this is an anthology where the proceeds went to supporting the QSF website.

Cynthia and Wilder Bloom, stories in the Longest Night Watch II anthology.

Props, a story in the Longest Night Watch I anthology. So this is an anthology where the proceeds go to Alzheimer’s research.

Surprises, a story in Book One of the 42 and Beyond Anthology set.

The Boy in the Band, a story in the Pride Park anthology. So this is an anthology where the proceeds go to the Trevor Project.

The Interview, the featured story in the December 14, 2018 edition of Theme of Absence. So they even interviewed me!

The Last Patient, a story in the Stardust, Always anthology. This was an anthology where the proceeds go to cancer research.

The Resurrection of Ditte, a story in the Unrealpolitik anthology.

This is My Child, a short story published in the April 8, 2019 edition of Asymmetry Fiction, another site which is no more.

Three Minutes Back in Time, a short story published in Mythic Magazine.

Killing Us Softly, a short story published in Corner Bar Magazine.

Darkness into Light, a short story published in Corner Bar Magazine.

WIP Corner

So my current WIPs are as follows:

The Obolonk Murders Trilogy – so this one is all about a tripartite society. But who’s killing the aliens?

The Enigman Cave – can we find life on another planet and not screw it up? You know, like we do everything else?

The Real Hub of the Universe Trilogy – so the aliens who live among us in the 1870s and 1880s are at war. But why is that?

Mettle – so it’s all about how society goes to hell in a hand basket when the metals of the periodic table start to disappear. But then what?

Time Addicts – No One is Safe – so this one is all about what happens in the future when time travel becomes possible via narcotic.

Time Addicts – Nothing is Permanent – this is the second in this trilogy. What happens when time is tampered with and manipulated in all sorts of ways? It’s the ultimate in gaslighting, for one thing.

Time Addicts – Everything is Up For Grabs – as the timelines smack together and continue to diverge, it gets harder to tell the “real” timeline from all the newer fake ones. And what if some of the changes are for the better?

Prep Work

So currently, my intention, for 2024’s NaNoWriMo, is to write the third trilogy in the Time Addicts/Obolonks universe. But I need to iron out the plot! So a lot of this year has been spent on that. I have no name for this one yet.

For 2023 NaNoWriMo, I have decided to create a prequel for two or three more of the five main universes: Obolonks (while the Obolonks and Time Addicts are in the same universe, I just plain want to write two separate prequels!), Untrustworthy, The Enigman Cave, and Mettle.

If 2023 NaNo goes like 2022 NaNo did, then whichever one I do first will end up sticking to the script and complete relatively early, and then the second one will … meander.

If I had to choose two which would fill the bill in that fashion, it would either be Untrustworthy + Obolonks or Mettle + Enigman Cave.

This is mainly because the first in each pairing are relatively well-defined, whereas the second of the pairings? Eh, not so much. But that could change.

So, I anticipate a lot of fun and perhaps a little confusion. But it’s all good! And if I play my cards right, I can do the final pairing in 2024 and put off prepare the third trilogy till 2025.

First Quarter 2023 Queries and Submissions

So here’s how that’s been going during first quarter 2023.

Reprint

Coming right out of the blue, Mythic Magazine wants to do a second Best of Mythic and chose A True Believer in Skepticism!!! Yay!!!!

In Progress

As of first quarter 2023, the following are still in the running for publishing:

This list is the name of the story and then the name of the potential publisher.

† I Used to Be Happy – Gemini Magazine
• Justice – Adbusters
† Mettle – RAB
• Soul Rentals ‘R’ Us – A Thousand One Stories
† Who Do We Blame for This? – Sonder Review

All Other Statuses

So be sure to see the Stats section for some details on any query statuses for first quarter 2023 which were not in progress.

Stats

So in 2018, my querying stats were:

† 68 submissions of 19 stories
• Acceptances: 4, 5.88%
† In Progress-Under Consideration: 3, 4.41% (so these never panned out)
• In Progress: 10, 14.71%
† Rejected-Personal: 14, 20.59%
• Rejected-Form: 24, 35.29%
† Ghosted: 13 (so these were submissions where I never found out what happened), 19.12%

So in 2019 my querying stats were:

• 23 submissions of 11 stories (so 6 submissions carry over from 2018)
† Acceptances: 4, 17.39%
• In Progress: 11 (so this includes 2 holdovers from 2018), 47.83%
† Rejected-Personal: 4, 17.39%
• Rejected-Form: 3, 13.04%
† Ghosted: 1 (so these are submissions where I never found out what happened), 4.35%

2020 Stats

So in 2020 my querying stats were:

• 37 submissions of 12 stories (so 9 submissions carried over from 2019)
† Acceptances: 3, 8.11%
• In Progress: 7, 18.92%
† Rejected-Personal: 12, 32.43%
• Rejected-Form: 4, 10.81%
† Ghosted: 11 (so these are submissions where I never found out what happened), 29.73%

2021 Stats

So in 2021 my querying stats were 5 submissions of 5 stories, 100% ghosted.

2022 Stats

So in 2022 my querying stats are:

† 6 submissions of 6 stories (so 5 submissions carry over from 2020 and 2021), plus 1 reprint!
• Acceptances (reprint; still waiting on it): 1,14.29%
† Rejected-Form: 1, 14.29%
• Ghosted: 5 (so these are submissions where I never found out what happened), 71.42%

2023 Stats

So in 2023 my querying stats are:

• 6+ submissions of 6+ stories (so 5 submissions carry over from 2022), plus 1 reprint!
† Acceptances: 2, 33.33%
• In Progress-Under Consideration: 4, 66.67%

It can be pretty discouraging and hard to go on when so little comes up which is positive. But I do need to work on promotions, too!

First Quarter 2023 – Productivity Killers

So it’s work, what else? I am working on a ton of things and since that is also writing, it can sometimes burn me out. Because First quarter 2023 will not be the end of that!

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SEO and its Discontents

Search Engine Optimization (SEO) and the Good, the Bad, and the Ugly

Discontents and SEO?

A look at SEO and its Discontents

Now, I am no expert by any means. But these days, I understand it a hell of a lot better than I did back in the day.But I know it’s important and so I’m going to take my shot at trying to optimize things as best as I can. The fact that the site and this blog are already on Google (and I already pretty much own jespah as a keyword – I’m #2 on Google already) is encouraging.

An Early Hint

In 2010 I met Kevin Palmer for a networking meeting, and told him I was interested in creating a new site for myself. And he told me — it’s like three legs of a stool: Content, Design and SEO.

Content I’ve got. I’ve got content coming out of my ears. I’ve got stuff to write like, like Carter’s got Liver Pills as my Dad would say.

As for design, I use WordPress. It is far, far simpler to just use their templates. They have an excellent understanding of how to put together a sweet-looking website and give it some style. And it’s mine and I made it and I am not only fully responsible for the content, I am also responsible in every way for its design and usability. With the help of WordPress, it’s prettier and more usable than ever.

SEO

But then there’s SEO. My friend, Robert Gentel, who runs Able2know, which we both manage (he’s the owner, I’m the Community Manager/Project Manager/Chief Cook, etc.), had been an SEO whiz (although his methods are a bit out of date). I have talked to him about it a little bit.

As I spread my own wings, I also learn from classes at Quinnipiac and from looking at Google’s own tools and, frankly, from my own experimentation.

I’ll either fly or fall onto the pavement. The first option is more attractive, so SEO it is.

Discontents Can End—Just be Sure to Replace Them With Knowledge

Oh and the title? It’s a play on Freud’s book. I’m not a big Freudian but I do love the title.

Sometimes a title is only a title.

Pulling it Into the Present Time

As I have learned more and more about SEO, I have also found that, much like Plato, I feel like I know less and less. But for me, the easiest way to look at it is to look at Google and how it does SEO.

What I mean is, Google knows that Bing will eat its lunch if it does not give users a good experience. And so, its mission in life is to make sure that people are served up as search results the sites that they really want. And need.

If I search for bunny, then it’s my own damned fault if I get both rabbits and Playboy models.

But when I search for bunny chow, my intent is rather clear. I’m most likely to be either an owner or a prospective owner, or I work with rabbits in some manner. That could be anything from a veterinary clinic to a wildlife preserve.

The chances of me really wanting to know, say, Barbi Benton’s diet are virtually zero.

What Can a Search Engine Really Do?

Search engines can only know what we tell them. A blog about tractors is highly unlikely to have any information on bunny chow. And if it does, then the owner of that blog will have to make it abundantly clear that they’ve got a post or a page on food for rabbits.

Search engines do a lot of counting, weighing, and measuring. If your page on rabbit food only mentions the food one time, and otherwise blathers on and on about tractors, then search engines will rightfully assume that food for bunnies is not top of mind for you.

And if it’s not top of mind for you the writer, but it is for the searcher, then the searcher won’t see your page.

Or at least your page will be so buried that it’ll be as if it does not exist. This is a far better experience for the searcher. So if you want the searcher to come look at your bunny food page, then you had best rewrite your post to cover the topic a lot more closely.

Google is not a fan of either haphazard sites or haphazard blog posts and landing pages. Find a point and find a topic and stick with them. A lot of the rest is just details.

Is that everything for SEO? Of course not. But I think it’s a framework to start from.

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Social Media: Hope, Hype or What?

Social Media: Hope, Hype or What?

Hype? Hope? Now, this subject has probably been done to death but, here I will do it all over again. Perhaps (hopefully!) my perspective will be fresh and/or of some value.

First of all, this post is inspired by The ABA Journal’s take on Social Media. As in the online magazine for lawyers. And they went on about Social Media, much like I have and others have, as well.

Hype Feeds Itself

And I can’t help feeling that that, in and of itself, is feeding the ole hype machine. Is Social Media hyped? Well, let’s put out an article about just that, and we’ll rev up the hype machine and get the word out and and and …. Suddenly, there’s hype about the hype.

Ai chihuahua.

However, there is, perhaps less of a hype issue than there is one of unrealistic expectations. I suspect that most people, if they give Social Media more than a passing glance (and, in particular, if they need to touch on it for business), take one look at it and think: free. Ooh, goody!

This marvelous free thing will supplement (and perhaps eventually supplant) all of the things I have to actually pay good money for! My wealth will increase, in an incredible and exponential manner, because I can put my advertising and marketing dollars elsewhere, outside of traditional (read: expensive) channels, and instead shove it all into some investment that catches my eye. Llama ranching, perhaps.

Traditional vs. Social Media Marketing

Okay. Let’s back up. The real thing is, Social Media marketing isn’t really an apples to apples comparison with traditional marketing. It’s more like holding a town hall meeting and seeing what people have to say about your product. Or like doing community outreach (e. g. having your company send people to work at a soup kitchen or build a house).

It’s like a million networking events. In short, it’s that dreaded, over-used term: relationship building.

And creating relationships is hard. And messy. Plus it’s not necessarily terribly free, at all.

Hype and A Sense of Entitlement

Because I have seen, in many instances, when software on a website changes. And in particular with community forums, people tend to freak out. They have a mislaid proprietary interest in a whole lotta sameness. Or they want the site to be the same from day to day, because that’s familiar to them.

Hence moving the post button from the left to the right, or changing its color, is akin to moving their cheese. So it tears at them.

But, ultimately, they figure it out. And they give it a chance and come back, and pretty soon, so far as they’re concerned things have always been the new way, and were never the old way. Because for them, it’s not about the tools; it’s about the people.

And the same thing should be true for you – and that should knock the hype right out, and for good. It’s not about the tools. It’s not about Twitter, or Facebook, or TikTok, or Groupon, or Yelp, or AirBnB, or MySpace (back in the day), or LinkedIn or StumbleUpon or Snapchat or a billion others. Instead, it’s about the people.


Want More About Social Media?

If my experiences with non-platform-specific social media resonate with you, then check out my other articles about navigating our social media obsessed world.

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Social Media’s Seduction AKA Oops, Did I Do That?
Social Media Background Check Being Used For Jury Selection
Social Media: Hope, Hype or What?
Social Media Balance
How Social Media Can Ruin Your Life
Happy Holidays, Social Media Style

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Social Media Marketing by Liana Evans, A Book Review
Book Review – Likeable Social Media by Dave Kerpen
The Zen of Social Media Marketing by Shama Hyder Kabani, a Book Review

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A Day in the Life of a Social Media Marketer
Five Ways for Charities to use Social Media
Four Important Social Media Stats
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The Best Lengths for Social Media Posts and More
Jell-O on the Wall: Social Media Perfection is Fleeting
When NOT to Post on Social Media Platforms

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Social Media and Writing Part 2
Social Media and Writing Part 3
Are You Promoting Your Writing With Social Media?

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A Day in the Life of a Social Media Marketer

Let’s Look at a Day in the Life of a Social Media Marketer

What does a social media marketer do all day? There is more to social media marketing than Community Management.

Job titles vary, and nothing seems to be settled yet in terms of prescribed, expected tasks. The Bureau of Labor Statistics does not really have a listing although they do acknowledge that social media is out there. They seem to be more or less placing it under Public Relations-style work.

However, a review of recent job postings reveals what social media personnel are mainly expected to do on the job, whether they are called Social Media Marketers, Inbound Marketers, Social Media Specialists or something else.

Platforms

Tasks related to platforms. This is what most people think of when they think of Social Media Specialists, and it includes:

• Blogging – either creating and maintaining one, or encouraging the business or engineering sides to create or maintain blogs, or commenting on and keeping blogs active. May also include polishing prose, suggesting topics and performing research

† Facebook – creating and maintaining a fan page or pages. Possibly make an account (or more than one) to communicate with users and potentially also find rogue fan sites (e. g. those not created by the company).

Perhaps to have them shut down or changed (usually at the behest of the Legal Department)

• X (Twitter) – creating accounts and maintaining them, tweeting to followers, reciprocally following as necessary/desired and possibly also helping to design a background or logo for the company X account(s). These tasks are similar if, instead, the company has an account on Bluesky.
† LinkedIn – creating and maintaining the company profile on LinkedIn, plus adding job openings as necessary
• Sharing and bookmarking services (these have changed over time) – create and maintain accounts. Make sure that blog posts and any company articles and press releases go to these services, and keep track of all mentions of the company and its products on these services

† Articles and Press Releases – working with the Public Relations Department. Release non-secret information in the form of articles and press releases as circumstances permit
• Podcasting and YouTube – working with the PR Department and if there is a Media Relations Department at the company. Create and release appropriate content as circumstances dictate
† Community Management – create, moderate, manage and promote any online communities owned by the company

More Tasks

Other possible tasks include:

• Search Engine Optimization Efforts – in conjunction with the Webmaster, work to promote the site on Google and other search engines, though a variety of activities including but not limited to establishing and maintaining authority with high quality articles and posts, the addition of backlinks from quality resources and helping to select the best keywords for the site.

This also includes working on how to get AI to cite the company.

† Analytics – reviewing Google Analytics (or Yahoo Analytics or Omniture or whatever the company is using). Help the Webmaster reduce bounce rate, increase loyalty, and increase the number of new users and page views

• On-Site Advertising (if applicable) – work with the Marketing Department and the Webmaster. This is to increase overall online advertising presence or decide on advertising for the site (e. g. banner versus skyscraper, etc.)

† Strategy – this is probably the biggest task for a Social Media person. Although it can also be more of a managerial job. Strategy should be defined and covered with the Board of Directors (or owner if the company is small).

Small changes such as adding a link here or there probably do not have to be a Board vote.

But major decisions on direction should be. This can also encompass working with Marketing, such as to determine better ways of presenting and delivering content. This can and should include A/B testing.

• Meetings and the Like – apart from the ones above, the Social Media Specialist should find they are a part of many different teams, potentially assisting with advertising, marketing, public relations, media, and web design

The Life of a Social Media Marketer: Takeaways

There is more to it than just the tools. What a real Social Media Marketer does is far more strategic and analytical and design-oriented. Twitter, etc. are only the beginning, and may be replaced by the next new thing(s) in time.

But well thought out strategy, carefully observed analytics and usable, pleasing design are timeless pieces of the Social Media Marketer puzzle.

And Later Still…

Social media marketing now can also encompass email marketing, or content marketing and management. It veers into the land of SEO as well, and even working with AI. There is nothing perfect about it, and it keeps on changing.


Want More About Social Media?

If my experiences with non-platform-specific social media resonate with you, then that is just plain awesome! So, please check out my other blog posts about navigating our social media obsessed world.

Working with Social Media

Four Important Social Media Stats
Social Networking/Social Media Tips

The Best Lengths for Social Media Posts and More.
Jell-O on the Wall: Social Media Perfection is Fleeting

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