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Tropes and the Allure of the Familiar

Background – Tropes

What are tropes? Should you always avoid them?

There is something about their familiarity. It is kind of comforting, in a way. But it can also be rather stale writing to lean on them too heavily. What are the pros and cons of them?

Marketing 101

Consider one of the most basic concepts of marketing, whether it’s the latest cutting edge digital marketing (AI-infused or not) or a billboard on a lonesome highway somewhere.

One of the core concepts for both is giving your buyer persona (your ideal customer) what they want. Let’s take that to product marketing for a second, shall we?

Now, it is highly unlikely that you will go broke selling cheese pizza if your pizza is at all decent and the marketing isn’t utterly saturated. This is because lots of people love pizza, and the cheese variety is as basic as you can get. Apart from pepperoni, extra cheese is the most popular pizza topping out there.

It can be made kosher or halal, and you can add it to any standard semi-vegetarian or lacto-vegetarian diet. Sounds awesome, right?

But what if you invent, oh I don’t know, pizza-flavored coffee?

People certainly enjoy both pizza and coffee. And they may even enjoy them together. So, why not put them together into one product?

Why not?

Because ick, that’s why.

Seriously. Don’t do this.

What Does Pizza Have to do With Tropes?

Your super standard cheese pizza is equivalent to a trope. It is not only popular. It’s also expected. Yet pizza-flavored coffee is unfamiliar and weird. Even when both elements sell well, the mashup sometimes just doesn’t make enough logical sense.

So, your idea of a horror mystery science fiction romance with talking unicorns and a guest appearance by Elvis is probably going to be a bit much to people. Even if they love every single one of the elements, the mashup feels forced, overdone, and just plain odd.

Tropes and Scènes à Faire

Er, what are scènes à faire? For that, you need to go back to copyright. Scènes à faire are not really tropes. They are something different entirely.

Here’s a set of examples.

Romance Scènes à Faire

The meeting and a first date. A first kiss, and a rivalry. A relationship in peril. And a happy ending. What do all these have in common? They are so common in romances that readers and audiences have come to expect them. And, you can’t copyright them unless you get extremely specific and/or put a new twist on them.

These are all examples of scènes à faire. You’ll never get into copyright trouble (er, I’m not your lawyer, but this is kinda obvious) if your romance contains a kiss.

Horror Scènes à Faire

Don’t go into the basement! Oh my gosh, don’t go anywhere alone! Trust no one! The Scream franchise played up scènes à faire to box office gold. Characters could stay alive if they could follow the unwritten ‘rules’ of the genre. Again, unlike Freddy or Jason, these are expected bits and not copyrightable.

Science Fiction Scènes à Faire

So, there are a few subsets of science fiction, including space opera, sci-fi/fantasy, and dystopia. They all have their own scènes à faire. In a space opera, a description of the ship is fair game. So are planets, stars, and moons.

In a fantasy, magical or near-magical elements (think ‘the Force’ in Star Wars) are something a reader or audience member has come to expect. And in a dystopia, expect elements of either a fallen civilization or a fascist one.

Why Are Scènes à Faire Okay, But Tropes Kind Of Aren’t?

There is a somewhat blurry line between the expectations that come with scènes à faire and the staleness that can often accompany tropes.

TV Tropes is a gold mine here. It’s all a rabbit hole you can find yourself falling down. So, here’s a sample. Let’s look at the trope they call, One Last Job.

In this trope, a career villain agrees to ‘one last job’ before retiring. This can end up with the villain’s death or comeuppance, or the villain rejects retirement, and a bunch of other variations. This can even be attached to a good guy agreeing to one last case or arrest or the like.

TV Tropes shows not only the trope itself and where it exists, but it also points out the variant. In Supernatural, for example, Sam is the one who wants to do ‘one last job’—but he’s a teenager. Hardly a person we would call seasoned.

The Copy/Paste, the Expectation, and the Reader

If I wrote a story about ghost-hunting brothers where one of them was going to do ‘one last job’ but was swept into the fray anyway, readers would probably feel it was familiar. And for anyone who knows Supernatural, it would be way too familiar.

So, that’s probably too close. But what if I make them sisters who are bounty hunters, and take the fantasy aspect completely out of the equation? Is that enough for it to feel original yet still familiar enough to please my buyer persona and meet their expectations?

The answer is—I don’t know, unless I try.

And neither do you.
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Takeaways

Tropes can actually be good tools for writing. But there are some caveats.

Getting too close to a source work or at least a general idea of one can feel stale and unimaginative. And if your own writing bores you, then imagine how your readers feel?

But getting too far away from it can throw out the baby with the bath water and turn into pizza-flavored coffee.

So, try to aim for a sweet spot, where a reader is comfortable and your work feels like coming home again, and not like a pale imitation of something that came before.

Wield your tropes wisely!


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Pocket Conflicts in Writing

What are Pocket Conflicts?

So, pocket conflicts are the kinds of conflicts which are tiny. They aren’t wars and they don’t lead to divorce or a firing. Instead, they are more about the speed of “who moved my cheese?

Hence they are kind of trivial, yet they can add a lot of annoyance into anyone’s life. And they can add color and interest to your characters, too.

Sibling Rivalry

Because the sibling relationship is often fraught with conflict, it can be the perfect vehicle for these types of conflicts. And if you have ever seen two children in the back of a car arguing about who last touched whom (or if you have ever been either of those children), or who last sat in front, then you know exactly what I am talking about.

And sibling rivalry does not necessarily go away when the siblings have grown up. Old resentments can crop up even when going through a deceased parent’s things. And the ‘kids’ might even be in their sixties by then.

Work Relationships

Pocket conflicts abound at work. And it’s not just cheese moving. What happens when someone moves somebody else’s desk? Or maybe someone was passed over for a promotion. Furthermore, colleagues can resent when a person has a different schedule if they don’t know why.

If a parent has to drop their children off at daycare, and has permission to do so, then there’s every possibility that employee will, on occasion, be late. And that can create a conflict with that person’s coworkers if the boss doesn’t explain things properly.

And let’s not even get started with the kinds of conflicts that come from being vaccinated—or not.

Pocket Conflicts: Takeaways

Get your characters out of their comfort zones, but only a little bit. Because sometimes the small pebble in your shoe can hold your thoughts more than the metaphorical gunshot wound to your gut. And your characters should be no different, if you want them to seem real.

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Writing Progress Report – Third Quarter 2023

Progress Report – Third Quarter 2023

How was third quarter 2023 for writing? So I spent third quarter 2023 just trying to keep my head above water. It was… tricky. So there was that…

Allow me to explain.

It’s All About the Spoons, or Lack Thereof

If you have never heard this expression before, then it may seem a bit odd. But I see it all the time in my circles. Must be the neurotic writer in all of us.

Let us assume that you have, say, ten spoons. And you need them for various tasks. You can’t change them for knives or anything like that. You just need spoons. And not necessarily for oatmeal. You need them for life in general.

Getting up on time might be one. Showering can be another. Eating a balanced diet is another. Getting enough exercise is one. Work probably takes a good four all by itself. What are we up to now? Eight, sports fans.

Now you’ve got just two more spoons to spend (or if you prefer, energy packs in a video game or the like). Your relationship (if you have one) may be one. Dealing with your family, even if that’s 100% pleasant, may be another. Cleaning. Cooking. Keeping up with current events. Pet care and/or child care if applicable. And on and on.

But you just spent your ninth and tenth spoons cooking dinner and calling your parents.

This is about the time to mentally (or maybe even out loud) trot out that old expression, “I can’t even.”

How Do You Get More Spoons?

Sleeping. Meditating. Doing healthy things (yes, cooking and making sure it’s nutritious, and exercising are all at least one spoon apiece. But they also help you recharge and reclaim a spoon here and there).

So, getting up in the morning and getting motivated to work out might be two spoons, but you get at least one of them back when you do. And you may even get three and end up ahead of the game.

You can also mess yourself up a good thousand ways till Sunday if you stay up too late (or have caffeine too late), or if you procrastinate and end up panicking to get things done.

Spoon destroyers also include things like being a caregiver, being laid off, etc. Recent inflation is a pretty nasty spoon destroyer.

Well, What Does All This Have to do With Me?

I recognize that this is a neurodivergent and somewhat convoluted way of describing what’s not exact depression but more like spent energies.

The year started with my mother’s 90th birthday and then her death a little over six weeks later. Understandably, that has clouded everything. It removes at least one spoon for every day, and that’s not meant to sound flip.

I also decided to change web hosting providers, and that has proven to be a bear—and I even understand this stuff. A bit. More spoons.

Clearing up the last of my mother-in-law’s byzantine estate? You guessed it: Spoon City, Population: me.

Write Those Spoons!

This is all a very long explanation for why querying feels so insurmountably hard these days. Why finishing a piece is an uphill slog. And why important stuff (including this blog) is pushed to the back a lot.

I need a ladle.

Third Quarter 2023 Posted Works

First of all, I worked on a number of new short stories. This is all 100% pantsing which is a little odd for me because I do like to plan stuff.

So, right now, on some of these I have no idea how they end!

Then on Wattpad I posted on the WattNaNo profile, and nowhere else.

Milestones

Also, I have written over 3.4 million words (fan fiction and wholly original fiction combined). So right now my stats on Wattpad for wholly original works are as follows:

• Dinosaurs – 42+ reads, 11+ comments
† How to NaNoWriMo – 26,027+ reads, 340+ comments
• My Favorite Things (like kibble) – 983 reads, 133 comments
Revved Up – 59,452+ reads, 531+ comments
• Side By Side – 20 reads, 2 comments
† Social Media Guide for Wattpad – 15,953+ reads, 592+ comments. This is under my actual name, Janet Gershen-Siegel.
• The Canadian Caper – 506 reads, 37 comments
The Dish – 250 reads, 24 comments
• There is a Road – 189 reads, 28 comments
† WattNaNo’s Top Picks 2018 – 1,975+ reads, 45+ comments
• WattNaNo’s Top Picks 2019 – 1,848+ reads, 10+ comments
† What Now? – 2,812+ reads, 104+ comments

More Published Works as of Third Quarter 2023

Also, I am amassing quite the collection of published works!

Untrustworthy, which is my first published novel. So yay!

A True Believer in Skepticism, published in Mythic Magazine.

Almost Shipwrecked, a story in the January 2019 edition of Empyreome, a site which unfortunately is no more.

Canaries, a short story in the March 29, 2019, edition of Theme of Absence.

Complications, a story in the Queer Sci Fi Discovery anthology. So this is an anthology where the proceeds went to supporting the QSF website.

Cynthia and Wilder Bloom, stories in the Longest Night Watch II anthology.

Props, a story in the Longest Night Watch I anthology. So this is an anthology where the proceeds go to Alzheimer’s research.

Surprises, a story in Book One of the 42 and Beyond Anthology set.

The Boy in the Band, a story in the Pride Park anthology. So this is an anthology where the proceeds go to the Trevor Project.

The Interview, the featured story in the December 14, 2018 edition of Theme of Absence. So they even interviewed me!

The Last Patient, a story in the Stardust, Always anthology. This was an anthology where the proceeds go to cancer research.

The Resurrection of Ditte, a story in the Unrealpolitik anthology.

This is My Child, a short story published in the April 8, 2019 edition of Asymmetry Fiction, another site which is no more.

Three Minutes Back in Time, a short story published in Mythic Magazine.

Killing Us Softly, a short story published in Corner Bar Magazine.

Darkness into Light, a short story published in Corner Bar Magazine.

WIP Corner

So my current WIPs are as follows:

The Obolonk Murders Trilogy – so this one is all about a tripartite society. But who’s killing the aliens?

The Enigman Cave – can we find life on another planet and not screw it up? You know, like we do everything else?

The Real Hub of the Universe Trilogy – so the aliens who live among us in the 1870s and 1880s are at war. But why is that?

Mettle – so it’s all about how society goes to hell in a hand basket when the metals of the periodic table start to disappear. But then what?

Time Addicts – No One is Safe – so this one is all about what happens in the future when time travel becomes possible via narcotic.

Time Addicts – Nothing is Permanent – this is the second in this trilogy. What happens when time is tampered with and manipulated in all sorts of ways? It’s the ultimate in gaslighting, for one thing.

Time Addicts – Everything is Up For Grabs – as the timelines smack together and continue to diverge, it gets harder to tell the “real” timeline from all the newer fake ones. And what if some of the changes are for the better?

Prep Work

So currently, my intention, for next year’s NaNoWriMo, is to write the third trilogy in the Time Addicts/Obolonks universe. But I need to iron out the plot! So a lot of this year has been spent on that. I have no name for this one yet.

For 2022 and 2023 NaNoWriMos, I have decided to create a prequel for each of the 5 main universes: Real Hub of the Universe, Obolonks, Time Addicts (while the Obolonks and Time Addicts are in the same universe, I just plain want to write two separate prequels!), Untrustworthy, The Enigman Cave, and Mettle.

So, I anticipate a lot of fun and perhaps a little confusion. But it’s all good!

Third Quarter 2023 Queries and Submissions

So here’s how that’s been going during third quarter 2023.

It’s been quiet. But that has been by design. Right now, I just plain don’t feel like putting myself out there these days. There, I said it.

In Progress

As of third quarter 2023, the following are technically (but I’m not getting my hopes up) still in the running for publishing:

This list is the name of the story and then the name of the potential publisher.

• I Used to Be Happy – Gemini Magazine
† Justice – Adbusters
• Mettle – RAB
† Soul Rentals ‘R’ Us – A Thousand One Stories
• Who Do We Blame for This? – Sonder Review

All Other Statuses

So be sure to see the Stats section for some details on any query statuses for third quarter 2023 which were not in progress.

Stats

So in 2018, my querying stats were:

68 submissions of 19 stories

† Acceptances: 4, 5.88%
• In Progress-Under Consideration: 3, 4.41% (so these don’t seem to have panned out)
† In Progress: 10, 14.71%
• Rejected-Personal: 14, 20.59%
† Rejected-Form: 24, 35.29%
• Ghosted: 13 (so these were submissions where I never found out what happened), 19.12%

So in 2019 my querying stats were:

23 submissions of 11 stories (so 6 submissions carry over from 2018)

† Acceptances: 4, 17.39%
• In Progress: 11 (so this includes 2 holdovers from 2018), 47.83%
† Rejected-Personal: 4, 17.39%
• Rejected-Form: 3, 13.04%
† Ghosted: 1 (so these are submissions where I never found out what happened), 4.35%

2020 Stats

So in 2020 my querying stats were:

37 submissions of 12 stories (so 9 submissions carried over from 2019)

† Acceptances: 3, 8.11%
• In Progress: 7, 18.92%
† Rejected-Personal: 12, 32.43%
• Rejected-Form: 4, 10.81%
† Ghosted: 11 (so these are submissions where I never found out what happened), 29.73%

2021 Stats

So in 2021 my querying stats were: 5+ submissions of 5+ stories (so 5 submissions carried over from 2020); 100% Ghosted. So, these are submissions where I never found out what happened.

2022 Stats

So in 2022 my querying stats were:

6 submissions of 6 stories (so 5 submissions carry over from 2020 and 2021), plus 1 reprint!

† Acceptances: 14.29%
• Rejected-Form: 1, 14.29%
† Ghosted: 5 (so these are submissions where I never found out what happened), 71.42%

It can be pretty discouraging and hard to go on when nothing new comes up which is positive.

Third Quarter 2023 – Productivity Killers

So it’s work, and see above. I am not seeing an end in sight for all these responsibilities and energy drains. Sigh.


If my works resonate with you, check out my other articles about my progress:

• Writing Progress Report – First Quarter 2023
† Writing Progress Report – Second Quarter 2023
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Self-Review – Props

Review – Props

Props was written as a part of an anthology benefiting the Alzheimer’s Association – The Longest Night Watch. This short story is a part of the first of the three volumes (so far).

I wanted the story to be a bit of a revelation, that someone could be paranoid but still seem coherent and onto something, at least for a while. It relies on the old trope of the only person seeing the monsters being the sane one.

But the reality is that Sarah Nichols is far from sane. Instead, her world is collapsing unto itself because of Alzheimer’s. She does not realize that she’s just incorrectly trying to connect certain events and people and places, all with a veneer of science fiction.

Sarah doesn’t know where she is, so she creates a fantasy for herself. It’s not a terribly comforting fantasy. Rather, her fantasy is of an alien abduction.

Background for Props

Because I wanted to write a story with an unreliable narrator, I turned to a familiar old science fiction trope: alien abductions. For what do addled people think is happening to them when they transfer to a nursing facility? It has got to be confusing at best. Hence I figured someone would see it as an alien abduction.

Plot

Sarah Nichols, the ultimate unreliable narrator, starts to see conspiracies and oddities all around her. Whatever this new place is, and whoever these new people are, they can’t possibly be real. Instead, she insists they are all props in a scary alien play.

Characters

The characters are main character (and unreliable narrator) Sarah Nichols and Social Worker Emily Chen. Otherwise, the people don’t seem real to Sarah, so they don’t get names.

Memorable Quotes

Day 35 – They can’t seem to get the look of us humans quite right. Every single subject looks old and careworn. Even a child I saw, a little girl – she looked careworn. If I were an alien and had a human test subject, I tell you, I would get this right. But their lack of quality control tells me that there are opportunities if I keep a look out for them.

Rating

Props has a K rating.

Props: Upshot

I think the story works pretty well. I am okay with how it was formatted (I should have probably been more insistent on changing it, but so be it). Please give generously. Alzheimer’s is a horrible disease.

If you ended up in a strange place, you might see everything as props, too. #amwriting


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Self-Review – Surprises

Review – Surprises

Surprises was one of those weird little stories which I did not expect to write. I thought The Enigman Cave was done and dusted.

So it’s a sequel of sorts to The Enigman Cave.

Background to Surprises

The background is that Marnie and company are on their way back to Earth. So it is not going to be easy going. Marnie is well aware the reception they get might not be such a great one. In fact, it could even be a death trap.

The Plot of Surprises

And the plot is, well, there isn’t too much of one. Essentially, Marnie and her pals get drunk, much like at the start of The Enigman Cave. But in this instance, they are worried about how the Earth is. And so Marnie ends up an emotional mess.

But keep in mind, it was a requirement of this anthology to add two specific elements. I had to add a towel and the number 42. So this was in keeping with the anthology’s Douglas Adams theme. For this space opera, it did not lend itself too well to either Easter egg.

Characters

The characters are Captain Marnie Shapiro and her first officer, Trixie LaRue, and the chief medical officer, Jazminder Parikh. Assistant Veterinarian Lex Feldman shows up. But it’s botanist Ben Chase who gets the most time – and he isn’t even “on screen”.

Memorable Quotes from Surprises

“We got ourselves a gol-darned party here,” LaRue said, her accent betraying every moment of a rural Kentucky upbringing. “Booze ‘n dancing girls.”

“Just the one dancing girl,” Parikh said, doing a little swishing step and then a twirl which made her lab coat fly out a little bit, like the barest approximation of a whirling dervish. Her accent, in marked contrast to LaRue’s, was the posh product of a fine education in Leeds and a childhood in a wealthy suburb of Hyderabad.

“Jazzie, you sound plummier than usual,” Marnie said. “How much of that have you had so far?” She waved a bit at the bottle.

“I’ve had just enough to make me all right with it being chardonnay and not merlot. It’s alcohol for the damned hoi polloi, even worse than that white zinfandel rubbish. It’s a sorry sop for the masses.” She stabbed the air with a finger. “But at least it’s posher than that six.”

Rating

The story has a K+ rating. While no hanky panky occurs “on screen”, there are certainly references to it. Plus, there is a bit of bad language and a brief bit of nudity at the end. However, I don’t describe the nudity in any way. So it’s just … there.

Upshot

It was great when 42 and Beyond published Surprises. But the anthology is no more. It only lives on in memory and in a few scattered books and Amazon Kindle files. A pity, as that one did extremely well on Amazon, hitting #3 in its Amazon category.

The biggest surprises for me was the chance to write this story at all. #amwriting


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Self-Review – The Interview

My Review of My Short Story – The Interview

The Interview came about because I conjured up a kicker of an opening line. So then it immediately started to fall into place.

Background

Since I have been on countless job interviews, this one was rather easy to write. So I brought forth a memory I have of an interview being conducted over lunch. It was an odd situation. Two guys met with me and neither of them ate anytime. I ate Caesar salad by myself.

Also, as I recall, they were supposed to take me to some swanky-ish place. But instead, we went to Pizzeria Uno. At that moment, I should have known damned well it was not going to go well.

Plot of The Interview

The narrator meets a woman who runs an agency which hunts demons. And then things go a little haywire from there. In particular, during their meeting, the narrator gives away how she can sense demons. So this is vital information. But not when the story ends, it isn’t. Then it turns into an albatross around her neck.

As for the restaurant, it is a combination of a number of places I have been to. The parking lot, in particular, is from Jasper White’s Summer Shack in Cambridge, Massachusetts. But with the wine steward and all, the pretend restaurant in The Interview is a lot more hoity-toity.

Characters

The characters are the narrator and the head of the agency.  The narrator is the interviewee.

Memorable Quotes from The Interview

“So, how long have you wanted to hunt demons?” The question hung in the air for a second.

The job interview was being conducted over lunch and I had just taken in a big forkful of Fettuccine Alfredo. I washed it down with iced tea, swallowed, wiped my mouth, and tried not to look stupid. “It’s since I was just out of school. My classmates didn’t see them. But I did.”

Rating

The Interview has a K rating. While there is some menace behind it, nothing violent happens “on screen”.

Upshot

I was so happy when The Interview was the featured story in the December 14, 2018 edition of Theme of Absence. So they even interviewed me! Canaries is another story in Theme of Absence. So I guess they like me.

Fortunately I have never had an interview quite like this. #amediting


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Self-Review – Mettle

Review – Mettle

Mettle is a punny title. And it just may be one of the best things I have ever written. Yes, really.

The story sprung out of a dream I had where my wedding ring dissolved while still on my hand. Amateur psychologists, take note!

It also came from reading about the 1816 ‘Year Without a Summer‘.

I had the basic plot sketched out in an afternoon. I don’t believe I have ever gotten a book together that fast. And I probably won’t ever again, although The Duck in the Seat Cushion comes close. This was just an insane creativity timeline.

And throughout the writing of this book, I felt like I was taking dictation.

So the characters are a mix. Some of them came very quickly. Craig Firenze sprang, almost fully formed, and almost immediately. I heard his voice the loudest and the clearest.

Then, as I recall, came Elise Jeffries, Nell Murphy, and Noah Braverman. Kitty Kowalski and Mink Lopez arrived together — Kitty and Mink. But the others took longer. However, I had Mei-Lin’s name pretty early on. But I did not know too much about the character to start.

Background

This story was exceptionally easy to outline. I changed nearly nothing. The storyline came to me, I wrote it down quickly, and then added a few little flourishes. I made sure it was in a coherent order. And then it was ready.

Which is amazing and kind of rare, seeing as I had struggled over the Time Addicts outline for Everything is Up For Grabs. In fact, even Untrustworthy was harder to put together.

Plot

In early 2020 (this date will likely change), Mount Tambora erupts as an earthquake hits Southeast Asia. So which came first? That’s sort of irrelevant, as a huge pyroclastic cloud springs up. This cloud blocks out a lot of sunlight and starlight. The world gets colder, and considerably dimmer.

Yet at the same time, Chinese students claim their experiments on chromium changed when the chromium somehow converted to vanadium. But that story about possible real-life alchemy is buried. Because Tambora and the earthquake are front page news.

When more elements start to convert to vanadium, people notice and experience the effects. This includes the loss of gold, which hits financial markets hard. And losses of plutonium and uranium, which put countries on high alert, afraid of a nuclear war.

The more things change, the harder it is to live the way we all used to. So, keep in mind that the quoted scene, below, takes place after the power goes out.

Characters

Mettle was an odd story for me because there almost isn’t a main character. Instead, the point of view shifts from chapter to chapter. The character with the most ‘screen time’ is probably Colonel Craig Firenze, but the more observational sections tend to come from Nell Murphy.

The scene is mostly Brighton, Massachusetts, although there are some scenes in Houston or in downtown Boston, plus a chapter is set mainly on an aircraft flying from Houston.

In a lot of ways, the story more or less takes place in my house.

There are about a dozen characters of note, mainly listed here in order of importance:

• Craig Firenze
† Nell Murphy
• Noah Braverman
† Eleanor Braverman
• Olga Nicolaev
† Elise Jeffries
• Mei-Lin Quan, MD
† Dez Hunter
• Minka Lopez
† Kitty Kowalski
• Jeannie Scutter Firenze
† Chet McKey
• Jerome Cordry
† Jackie (no last name)
• Shelley (no last name)

There are a few other characters who I name, but the reader sees these the most, although Jackie and Shelley are only in one chapter. Which happens to be the same chapter. The last six on the list do not get a POV chapter. Although Kitty will likely get one for the prequel. And Jeannie might, assuming I have more story to tell.

Memorable Quotes from Mettle

He started to dump the corn into a bowl.

Mink came into the kitchen. “What’s left in the cabinets?”

“Green beans, some tuna, I think I saw tomato paste in there,” Dez said as Mink opened the cabinets and started to look for herself.

“There’s pumpkin pie filling, too, and we still have peanut butter. I wish we had bread.”

“Want some corn?” He offered her the second bowl and fork.

“Yeah, sure, thanks.” He dumped about half of his bowlful into her bowl. “Kitty, what are you gonna have?”

“I want French toast.”

“If we had eggs, we could make French toast, if we had bread. And a working toaster. Aunt Doreen used to say shit like that.”

“Yeah, she’s hysterical,” Kitty sniped. “This blows.”

Mink just shrugged and ate as did Dez. When they were done, she bussed the dishes to the sink and washed them, and then started to wash the other dishes. “Man oh man, we don’t have to live like pigs. Can somebody dry?”

Kitty made a beeline out of the kitchen. Dez came over. “Just leave ‘em on the rack. I can get ‘em later.”

Rating for Mettle

Let me make this perfectly clear: Mettle has an MA rating. I am not kidding. While there are no sex scenes (a few are implied, though), every single main character has a potty mouth.

Plus there are any number of violent scenes. Some are more graphic than others but the worst should be rather disturbing.

I 100% mean this. Enter at your own risk if you don’t believe me.

Upshot

One thing which was great fun about this story was writing it with 9 1/2 points of view. I say a half because the first chapter is mainly news stories and flits from person to person and scene to scene. So that one doesn’t quite count. And with rewrites, I have changed it to add little scenelets but the common thread is still the news.

Each chapter worked as a separate POV. This is a style of writing I had not attempted before. And I found it exhilarating but it’s important to not confuse the reader. So I would really love to get beta readers on this one!

Wouldn’t the end of the world test anyone’s mettle? #amwriting


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Want More of Mettle?

If Mettle resonates with you, then check out my other blog posts and pages about how changes in the periodic table nearly kill us all.

Character Reviews: Mettle

Eleanor Braverman
Noah Braverman
Craig Firenze
Dez Hunter
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Self-Review – The Last Patient

Review – The Last Patient

The Last Patient was a story I wrote for the Stardust, Always anthology. All of the proceeds go to the American Cancer Society. Please give generously, even if you never buy the book. Cancer is horrid, and I have seen what it can really do to people. Let’s end this scourge in our lifetimes.

This short story is based on real events from my life.

Background

When I was in my first two years of college, I had a therapist. He was a fun guy; I liked him. Then I left Boston for the summer between sophomore and junior year. Yet when I returned, I noticed he was more stooped and paler. He seemed to be tired and weak.

I asked him what was wrong and he told me he had lung cancer. Keep in mind, this was late 1981 and that was essentially a death sentence.

I saw Dr. Brodie a few more weeks, with our last session happening before Halloween of that year. He told me that he didn’t want to see his other patients, who were all a lot older. At age nineteen, he felt I was lively and that helped him. He told me that I was his last patient.

Plot

I lifted this story directly from my memories: hook, line, and sinker. A few of the quotes are precisely as I remember them. It wasn’t writing. This was me taking dictation from my own memories.

Characters

The only characters are the unnamed narrator and Dr. Richard Brodie.

Memorable Quotes

Thirty-five years ago, a sacred trust was unexpectedly given to me, to be a friend and confidant to the man who was supposed to be mine. I did what I could, but I was not ready for it.

Rating for The Last Patient

The story has a K rating.

The Last Patient: Upshot

I would have liked to have shown him works like Untrustworthy. I think he would have been happy for me.

Even now, over forty years later, I remember how he looked a bit like Broderick Crawford. Funny, the things you remember.

I was his last patient. #amwriting


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Self-Review – All My Aliens

Self Review – All My Aliens

All My Aliens? What the hell?

Background

This was a story originally created for a competition. But it also came from a very wacky idea I had had several years previously.

The concept was, how would First Contact happen? And so I hit upon a very strange way to do it.

Plot

Because TV is more important to many of us than we would care to admit, the idea was a simple one.

My aliens would have to originally contact us on television. And, even better, it would have to be via the medium of fiction. But what would be the best means of doing this? After all, TV shows are cancelled all the time. It would have to be something long-term, with little to no chance of cancellation.

And then I hit upon the more or less perfect answer.

Soap operas.

And so the idea was born – my aliens would make contact with us via the soaps.

My Aliens: the Characters

The characters are not of this earth, of course. The only two who really get names are Chaz and Katherinemma. Katherinemma got her name because Alyssa Milano had (at the time) recently named her daughter Elizabella. So K got her name as a kind of homage to that.

And Chaz, of course, was the most typical and obvious male soap star name we could think of.

The Action

Some of my favorite parts of this story are how the action zooms from the strangers thinking about contacting Earth to the stars getting here. And then, of course, they have to get to Area 51 (because, reasons). And, of course, the daytime Emmy awards.

No good soap opera would ever be complete without a dramatic scene with a slap. No good story about celebrities would ever be complete without some crazed fan screaming about having her idol’s baby. And no good science fiction yarn would ever be complete without something with tentacles.

Fortunately, the story has all of that.

It also has what, I feel, is perhaps the funniest ending line I have ever written.

Rating

All My Aliens is probably a K when you get right down to it.

All My Aliens: Upshot

You can find it in the Longest Night Watch II, if I recall correctly.

All My Aliens — because TV is a logical choice for communicating with humans. #amwriting


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Self-Review – There is a Road

Review – There is a Road

There is a Road originally came about as a response to an image prompt on the old Trek United. However, I do not have the rights to use that image, and Trek United is a mere shell of its former self.

Background

The original image was a dreamy almost black and white, very shades of gray type of image. It was a wooden pathway into the woods, bending and seemingly with no ending.

Plot

The narrator is never named. She talks about her grandmother’s death from smoking, and her father’s from a transport accident. She mentions aliens and flying. Hence the time must be the future, and perhaps it is a rather deep future versus right now.

And then the narrator talks about making art. As she describes her process, the reader begins to understand that the narrator has screwed something up royally. Whether there has been an explosion or a fire, it hardly seems to matter. Because all that matters is that (spoiler alert), the narrator numbers among the dead.

Characters

The only character is the unnamed narrator, although she refers to her father and her grandmother. Since it’s a narration, it doesn’t really have quotes.

The Road to Story Postings

This story is really only available on Wattpad.

There is a Road on Wattpad

Rating

The story is Rated K.

Takeaways from the Road

This story is odd and dreamy and probably a little too spiritual for regular consumption. Also, there is just no way it could ever get a sequel or the like. Could I take it off Wattpad and submit it to an anthology? I suppose I could but, frankly, I do not think it stands as one of my better works.

The piece is old and the seams do show. Still, it is an interesting premise, and perhaps I should rework it one of these days.

There is a road — and it leads to this. #amwriting


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